Episode 4: Lazy May!

[Harley Scarow]

Nighttime has arrived, with the silvery moon glistering over the peaceful and calm area of Maple Town, when May is in professor Sap and her husband, Syrus's house relaxing after a day of doing absolutely nothing but devouring plate after plate of food. The streets still had people, but not a crowded amount, and the sound of petit Pokemon such as Rattata, Sentret, and Zigzagoon were still heard as trainers stayed out and played with training.

In the wooden, but sturdy house that May, Sap, and Syrus were in, May was still gobbling down more food, this time eating two cheeseburgers that Syrus cooked for her with lasting patience, as he has done so for her throughout the day without a word of complaint. May wiped her mouth with a table tissue. "That was sure good! Can I get another double-cheeseburgers? I love the way that you cook and I wish that I can get as much as I want."

"You're going to get a tummyache if you keep eating your food at that rate, May," warned Sap with a voice showing that she cared. "Maybe you should chew all of your food before you eat, like normal people- it makes the food tastier and easier to digest."

May shrugged her shoulders. "Nah. I don't feel like it. Food never gives me a tummyache," she finished another plate. "Can I get another one?"

The doorbell suddenly rang, alerting Sap. "I wonder who it is? I'll get it for you," she approached the door and opened it with a wooden creek. "Oh hi."

It was Drew, with a serious yet negative look on his face after what happened to him earlier. "Yep, it's me, Drew," he walked inside the house, closing the lodge door as he did so and sitting down on one of the seats on the dinner table. "So what kind of training did you do, May?"

"I had a lot of eating training!" answered May, perky. "Ate as much as I wanted to!"

Drew grunted. "Hmmph . . . you sound just like a little spoiled rich girl that deserves to get nothing."

"And what do you mean by that?" May questioned sternly.

"Like I said earlier today, you're acting like these people have to cook food for you, May. You should show some consideration by saying a 'thank you' or an 'I appreciate it' once in a while. You can't just gobble up all of that food and expect this to be an all you can eat buffet!"

Syrus, wearing a gray sweater and blue jeans, was doing talented cooking moves with the saucepan that he was holding as he tossed food into the air and skillfully caught it. "You don't have to worry about any of that, Drew. Seeing people eat the food that I make is thanks enough for me. Don't forget that it's show and not tell, after all." Syrus looked directly at Drew. "So . . . did you meet my powerful son, Rick? How did the battle turn out?"

Drew slowly turned his face the other way, showing the back of his green hair with the white streak shimmering in the light. "I . . . I lost . . . " answered Drew in a very low and unclear voice, but was just enough to be heard. "I did . . . it was a tough battle that I had with Rick . . . " as he said those words, he slowly turned around again.

May had an astonished look on her face. "You lost, Drew?!" May began laughing out loud. "No way! There's absolutely no way that you could lose, Drew! You're just saying that so that Syrus won't be down that his son lost, aren't you, Drew?"

Drew was annoyed at May's words. "Yes! I lost! Do you have a problem with that? You're acting like I'm some kind of magical trainer that can never lose a Pokemon Battle, May! Well if you really think that, then I say that you should go and get some training of your own, since this is real life that we're talking about here!"

"I wouldn't be sad if my son lost," Syrus caught food onto a plate and placed it on the dining table, which May started to devour without saying a word. "If he lost, then I say that's reasonable. Like Drew said, nobody in this world is actually unbeatable- every trainer has his or her weakness, and that can't be avoided." Syrus looked directly at May with a reassuring face. "I say that you should take Drew's advice and train, May. Hard work always pays off at one time or another."

May had a look of laziness on her face. "Nah . . . I don't want to train right now."

"You don't have to go outside into the silver of night right now, May," explained Sap. "We mean that you should go out and have that preparing when tomorrow comes, since that's when the sun is up and you and your Pokemon are all fully refreshed, after all. You should go and get some rest in your guest room upstairs."

May stretched her arms, showing that she was tired of eating and was ready to settle in. "Maybe you're right, and maybe you're not. You're right about the going to sleep part- I'm all tuckered out and I really need my beauty sleep. But you're wrong about the part of me having to train myself and my Pokemon tomorrow, since it's going to be another day of me doing nothing and resting my troubles away in bed, getting free food whenever I want some like a spoiled little brat."

Syrus was astonished at those words. "How can you even say something like that? Whatever. We'll worry about all of that tomorrow. Just go somewhere and get a good night sleep, since I'm all tired to make you any more food. I also need to get some rest also." Syrus looked around. "Where's Rick doing out this late?"

"Chances are that he's outside somewhere training," explained Drew. "And by the way, I should go to the yard and train also."

"What kind of lowlife would devote all of his free time on training?" May wondered. "I say put off what you can always do tomorrow," she got up and began walking out the room. "See ya. I'm heading over to bed now so that I can get a good night sleep, unlike the most of ya."

* * *

May went up the stairs, holding the dark-brown wooden handrails, until she got to the hall. She went left and entered her room, which was filled with small flowers inside little cups that greeted her as she entered the room; a double-bed with a blue blanket and the floor was made out of smooth wood that wouldn't give a splinter; Sky-blue curtains were there to add more flavor into the room, and happened to be thin enough to see outside the yard and would allow the sun in the morning. The room smelled as if you were outside in nature, with flower pots in a comfortable spot just outside the open window, letting in a gentle breeze that waved May's hair slightly.

May jumped onto the bed the moment that she entered, with the bed puffing up and down from her force. "This is the life . . . I love this bed . . . I love the food . . . I love the smell . . . I love the house!" she then mumbled small things under her breath that was vague, and she closed her eyes with a little of her hair falling on her forehead. "Yeah . . . I wish that I can stay here forever . . . "

* * *

Back downstairs, Drew left the house without taking anything with him except for himself and his PokéBalls. Before the door closed behind him, the gentle night breeze slightly flew into the house. Some outside noise of trainers making silent conversations and Pokemon cries were also heard.

"That boy sure is dedicated!" commented Syrus. "One heck of a good trainer."

"Yep," agreed Sap. "Kind of reminds us of our son."

* * *

Outside, in the cool breeze of night, the stars were seen above the tranquil town; the colorful leaves that decorated the ground during the day had a more calm and monochromatic color; with the breeze flowing through Drew's green hair, lifting it up a little bit.

Drew walked in circles outside in a slow, pacing manner. "What can I do to train? I doubt that doing the usual 'send out Pokemon and practice' will help," he was talking silently to himself. "Maybe the best thing that I can do after what happened today, is think . . . " he stopped walking at one spot and slowly settled down, lying down on the lush, green grass with his arms behind his head and his legs straight out in a relaxing matter. His eyes looked at the stars, with the appearance reflecting off his gazing vision.

A couple walked by with two kids on the sidewalk.

I think that the best training that I can do at this point is think . . . thought Drew. A good way to release my mind and come back to what it once was. Drew's head moved as he looked at the many stars in the sky. I can't believe that Rick was able to beat me so easily. I have to say that any trainer that can even stand one minute against me has to be someone good, not that I'm trying to be a conceited person or anything. But the way that he was able to emerge from the battle victorious, without me even landing one hit on his Pokemon, is something that I'm going to be contemplating for a long time . . . I find it something amazing . . . something remarkable . . . something I'm missing . . . Drew smiled as he saw images of his Pokemon forming from the stars; his Roselia, Masquerain, and Flygon appearing consecutively. I think that the best thing that I can do now, is get some rest . . . Drew's eyes closed with a winning smile on his face as he lied down on the bed in a comfortable manner and appearing to be more relaxing or calming than sleeping in a real bed.

* * *

After a few hours of sleep in the smooth and silvery night, with May in her comfortable bed upstairs with her spoiled face, and Drew in the front yawn, sleeping as if he was in luxury. The sun gently shined down on May's face in her bedroom, making her turn to the size and resume sleeping in her vast laziness, along with the chirping bird Pokemon that have also woken up, like Pidgey and Taillow. Drew got up at 7:00 PM, going inside the lodge house and doing the usual morning routines in the bathroom, unlike his lazy friend May, whom has been acting like this since yesterday, while Drew already has thoughts of training.

Drew went downstairs after brushing his teeth and washing his face, also pulling on his purple blazer a little until he was comfortable. He went into the living room, which had a lodge table with four stools on it, similar to the dining table in the other room but smaller; a TV that was in a drawer that you could open to reveal the screen; and a shining, wide window with the sight of the backyard garden; the walls were also decorated with beautiful pictures of Pokemon, including Furret, Noctowl, and Bevadam. "This place sure looks like a nice place to rest," Drew took a seat.

Syrus entered the room, wearing a long-sleeved orange shirt with blue stripes on it and his usual jeans, "Hey Drew. Good morning."

"Yeah, thanks. I'm gonna head out and train right now, okay Syrus? I told myself yesterday that I would do so the first thing that I wake up in the morning, so here I go." Drew looked around the room for a moment, expecting that another person would be here. "Where's May right now? She should go outside and train with her Pokemon too. After all, you said that tomorrow would be the day of the Pokemon Contest of Maple Town, is that right?"

Syrus nodded in agreement. "Yep, that's right. I'm going to head out and go for a morning walk as well . . . May, on the other hand, is keeping her word about staying inside and lazing off all day. What should I do? Knowing that someone is goofing off in my house does disturb me to the end."

Drew put his finger on his chin, indicating that he was thinking. He then jolted up from his light-brown stool with an idea. "I have a good one." he went over to Syrus and whispered something in his ear.

Syrus was amazed. "How can I forget something like that, Drew? You have such good ideas." Syrus began walking the other way, with a scheming look on his face as he took a plate of cheeseburgers that were on the kitchen table. "I'm putting that plan to work!" he said in the kitchen from a distance.

Drew smirked. "Lazy, lazy May . . . "

* * *

Syrus was upstairs, and made a left so that he could get to May's room, with the comfortable ornaments of home neatly arranged in there. He came over to May's ears, with a look of excitement on his face. "Hey May . . . I think that I have something that you may want . . . but if you want to get it, then you're going to have to get up and do something for me." he held the plate with the cheeseburgers near her nose.

May, without opening her eyes, sniffed the cheeseburgers with a morning, smiling face. "Huh . . . id that what I think it is? . . . " May jolted up from the bed as if she drank ten energy drinks and grabbed the plate of cheeseburgers. "Cheeseburgers! Give me them! Gimme, gimme, gimme, gimme, gimme!" she held the plate above her mouth and they both fell in, being devoured by the hungry May in seconds. She gulped them down with a spoiled look of unsatisfaction on her face. "Hey . . . I need more! Two is definitely not enough when it comes to feeding me!" she calmed down. " . . . can I get some more?"

Syrus chuckled, about to reveal his plan. "Sure you can get some more, May . . . I'll make anything that you want for you . . . "

"Oh really? Then get me twenty more cheeseburgers and hold the pickle!"

"You're going to have to do something for me."

"What do I have to do for you?" asked May. "Is it something big? Do I have to eat ten plates so that I can get an extra twenty or something? If that's it, then I'll do it for you!"

"You're going to have to have a Pokemon Battle with me right now," explained Syrus. "If you somehow manage to beat me in one, then I'll be glad to give you a hundred cheeseburgers for all I care. However, if you lose, then you get nothing and I won't cook for you as long as we're in Maple Town until you train and show me that you're determined to live up to that. Is that a deal, May?"

May nodded her head in agreement. "Fine. Where are we going to have this Pokemon Battle? Can it be somewhere that I can breathe and not have a whole bunch of other Pokemon Trainers watching? I don't want you to embarrass yourself when a little girl like me manages to beat an adult like you." May giggled. I can't wait until I get those super delicious cheeseburgers! she thought. "Well then let's get going already. The sooner that I beat you, the sooner I can get my cheeseburgers and eat all day without having to worry about having to do any 'training.' I think this is going to be an easy one."

Syrus pointed out the window. "We're going to be battling out there, okay May?" he approached it and looked down, with May also doing so. "You see that arena down there? We have our own private arena so that our family and friends can participate there without having to go somewhere else." he began walking out the room and went to the top of the stairways, with his finger curling at May, informing her to follow him downstairs so that they can get to the arena. "Come with me, May . . . the arena's in the backyard and I can see that you're pretty hungry. Let's go and bring it on!" he started walking down the stairs.

May began gushingly moving also. "Wait for me, Syrus! I'm gonna beat the pants off ya!"

* * *

[Harley Scarow]

Syrus arrived outside in the backyard, with May arriving moments after he did. There was a Pokemon Battling arena that was made out of furniture shining wood, the kind that wouldn't give you any splinters. There was a set of stairs at each side that was meant for the battling trainers to walk up. You could see that the furnished wood is brand new, it wasn't battled on that much, or was kept in good condition. There was a grill a few feet away from the arena, with buns and cheeseburger ingredients on a small table next to it, which got May, excited but didn't eat anything because she didn't know how to put the buns together.

Syrus went into the left side of the arena, going up the small set of steps with a hollow sound inside. May jumped up the right side of steps, landing on the trainer's box with a fairly loud thump.

"Let's start this," Syrus took out a PokéBall and threw it releasing a Shiftry. "Make your move."

Shiftry, a the Grass and Dark wily Pokemon with white fur on top and brown on the bottom, with shocking yellow eyes, a pointed-brown nose, leaves for hands, and two bars for feet had an angry look on its face, ready to battle. "Shiftry!" it screeched.

May wasn't scared. "That thing looks so . . . not scary!" she threw her PokéBall, which released Combusken. "Go Combusken and teach Syrus and his Shiftry a lesson!"

Combusken, a standing Fire and Fighting young fowl Pokemon with sharp claws and toenails, also having red lips that looked as if it ate something spicy. "Combusken!" it had a loud and raspy voice.

"Shiftry, use your Wind Leaf!" ordered Syrus.

Shiftry jumped in the air, leaping as it did so and swung down at Combusken with its razor-sharp leaves shining in the morning sun with red patterns on it aiming at its face. Combusken managed to jump out the way and land on its feet with Shiftry attempting again.

"Combusken, use your Slash attack to defend!" ordered May, with one of her insane antics.

Syrus was confused. "How could Slash defend? . . . " He whispered to himself. "Watch out!"

Shiftry attacked Combusken with its leaves, only to be blocked by Combusken as it crossed its arms, now with glowing nails from using Slash, across its body in a defending stance. Combusken attempted to Slash Shiftry when it fazed a little, but Shiftry jumped out of the way using its Quick Attack.

"Combusken, use your 10KPS Kick!" ordered May. "Give that Shiftry something to really feel pain!"

Combusken jumped and kicked Shiftry so fast that it looked as if there were many copies of it doing so, but was blocked by it as it used the same method as Combusken; holding its leaves out as a shield.

May, not knowing what was happening, had an excited look on her face, convinced that she would win. "Keep going at it, Combusken!" I can't wait until I get my cute hands on those cheeseburgers! May giggled.

Combusken leaped into the air again and went back down with blinding speed, attempting to hit Shiftry. Shiftry used its own speed to dodge the upcoming kicks, jumping out of the way multiple times. The next one looked as if it was about to hit for real.

"Shiftry, use your Double Team!" ordered Syrus.

Shiftry became multiple copies, six to be exact, which didn't cast a shadow in the sun and looked slightly transparent. Combusken multiple-kicked the fake one, making it vanish and the real one was safe.

"Keep going at it!" urged May. "We almost got those cheeseburgers, Combusken!"

Combusken used the same attack again, with the speed building up so quick that it looked as if there were multiple copies, all going for one Shiftry at a time. All of the Shiftry leaped and dodged; even the fake ones acted as if they were real as they leaped in their own directions. The blinding speed Combusken became one again.

"When it attacks, you go," said Syrus.

"If that thing keeps moving, then it looks like we're gonna have to stop you somehow!" yelled May. "Combusken, use your Fire Spin attack!"

"Combusken!" the young fowl Pokemon shot a twister of flames from its mouth that directed Shiftry, which used Quick Attack to move out of the way. The Fire Spin caused a tower of flame that began to follow Shiftry, with the wooden arena burning as it went so. Shiftry was eventually surrounded by the flames on the ground caused by the attack, and had nowhere to go while the tower was approaching in speed.

"Use your Fan Whirlwind!" directed Syrus.

Shiftry began waving its two hands made out of sharp fan leaves and the fire began to blow in the other direction, even heading for May's trainer box and surrounding her with small flames. The Fire Spin blew out and caused more small embers to burn on the ground, which happened to singe the wooden floor, making some of it collapse and potholes forming.

May laughed. "You should have thought better before you decided to use a Grass-type Pokemon against a Fire-type Pokemon, and don't think that the wooden arena makes that one any better." The flames surrounding May began to get a little bigger and grew until they began to burn her skirt. "Ow! Ow! Get it off, get it off!" she yelled as she left the trainer's box, grabbing a water hose and spraying the flame off her butt's fire, which was almost beginning to spread. "What kind of foolishness?!" May also dosed out some of the fire in the trainer's box, and got back on it with an embarrassed face that she had to do something like that in front of another person, and during a Pokemon Battle makes the situation worse, as Shiftry went in the air and slashed Combusken while it didn't have any time to react to it.

"Good job," complimented Syrus. "Yeah . . . that was kind of funny, May, the way that your rear was flaming like that. Maybe if you didn't eat so many cheeseburgers, an accident like that wouldn't happen!"

May was angry at those sarcastic comments. "What the f*** are you talking about?! If it wasn't for that stupid Shiftry of yours blowing my beautiful Fire Spin away, then none of that sh*t would have ever happened! And you are so cheap, you big dumba**! You attacked my Combusken when I was trying to save myself and put out the fire on your arena! I should have left the cheap field burning for all I care!" May's face burned in anger. "Combusken, use your Fire Spin on that stupid trainer so he can know how it feels!"

"Combusken?" it didn't want to harm any human, and knew that May was out of control anyways. It nodded its head and didn't obey.

"So that's what you think about Pokemon, May? Tools of fighting and hurting others so that you can get a good lunch?" Syrus was disappointed. "Well then you might as well give up right now. Shiftry, use your Faint Attack on Combusken!"

"Shiftry!" the many Shiftry vanished in a purple leave and reappeared, surrounding Combusken and all hitting it at once.

May was enraged. "Oh there you go again, with the cheap antics! You know that I was angry so you decided that taking advantage of that situation would make things better, right? Well if you want to feel the power of cheapness, then here it is!" May ran in a rage over to Syrus's side and attempted to punch him, which was blocked when Syrus held her hand back.

"What do you think that you're doing?" forcing asking May. "I think that you're out of your mind!"

May swung her arms in anger and in a blur, but none of them hit as Syrus held her head in front with her arms not long enough to do so. "What do you think that you're doing? Scared to face me head on?"

Syrus grabbed May by the collar, and threw her all the way across the field, making her land back in her trainer's box as Syrus was worried about May's behavior. "I think that you're nuts. I should disqualify you right now, but you're lucky that I'm the kind of guy that could put up with you."

May got on her feet with fury and shaking as there was dirt on her body and even though the arena had shining wood, she had splinters from the burning rush of her body as she was pushed over there. Combusken went over to her side, worried about its trainer's craziness. "What do you think that you're doing? Go use Sky Uppercut and beat that cheapskate Pokemon and its oversized trainer!"

"So you're calling me a cheapskate for legally battling, are you May?" Syrus shouted. "Sorry for breaking the rules, commissioner, but I never heard of a rule that said you couldn't make a move on another Pokemon while its trainer was being distracted by something. Now Shiftry, use your Still Life attack."

Shiftry and all of its fakes began glowing green, and when it stopped, the fakes no longer had a transparent body and there was a shadow now. "Shiftry!" they all screeched in the sound of a crowd. The Sky Uppercut from Combusken hit Shiftry directly, but the glow seemed to repel the attack.

May was confused and still angry, but not insane as she was a few moments ago. "What the fu** do you think that you're doing you moving piles of sh**?! Combusken, use your Flamethrower on all of them!"

Combusken responded by shooting out a jet of flames that attacked the Shiftry, but all of them used their bar-shaped feet to jump out the way as the flame went to each one respectively. When they landed, the wooden stage underneath them broke at that spot, as their feet were very heavy and made a loud crushing noise. The Shiftry were right next to May, and Combusken kept attacking, and when that Flamethrower was dodged by the agile Shiftry, it hit May by accident!

May was being burned with the flames with her arms flying comically and her face being singed by the attack. She punched the raging flames in anger and the attack stopped, with May's face burnt in a comical way and her breathing hard in rage. "What the fu** do you think that you're doing you stupid chicken Pokemon?! You didn't stop attacking when that flying hairball got to where I was?! Your lack of marksmanship amazes me, Combusken!" May shook her head, making all of the soot on her face and on her blouse fall away onto the ground and leaving the dirt that she had on herself earlier shaken and littered the almost destroyed arena.

"Maybe if you treated your Pokemon with more respect, you can get them to do what you want them to do," explained Syrus. "You're acting like Combusken is some kind of fighting machine that has no heart in it and can follow your every command without having some kind of reaction to it. That kind of thinking about Pokemon . . . no. If you think in any way about that in anything that lives, if its a plant, a person, or even something that is immobile, then you have a lot to learn, May. That Combusken of yours was doing a fine job before you decided to make yourself angry from one tiny little accident and let that overwhelm you. If you can't let small things aside, then I'm afraid that you better go out and train more often, as you're not in any condition to be inside snoozing the entire day away."

May became angry again. "If I can't use my Pokemon to do the work for me, then I might as well get you myself." May took the water hose that was lying on the ground and sprayed it intensely, with the target being all of the Shiftry. "Take that!"

Shiftry jumped out of the way, and the water hit Combusken! Since it was a Fire-type Pokemon, it yelled in pain while it was on the ground, weakly crawling away and struggling to stop its suffering. "Combusken . . . combusk . . . "

May instantly dropped the water hose. "Combusken!" May calmed down sharply and ran over to the fallen fowl Pokemon on the ground, tripping on one of the broken spots on the arena that was destroyed by the attacks used during the battle. "Ow . . . " she rushed up, ignoring that there was a bruise on her leg and ran over to her Pokemon. "Are you okay, Combusken? Please tell me that you're alright, my beloved Pokemon."

Syrus actually felt kind of sorry for May at this point. "I still need to teach you a lesson . . . the hard way . . . Shiftry, use your Wooden Kick attack!"

"Shiftry!" all of the copies jumped in the air and did a flip, then all of their bar-shaped feet glowed, kicking Combusken and May while they were all on the ground without any showing that it cared for the situation that their opponents were in right now, and knew that Syrus was right about this being a Pokemon Battle and that there were no exceptions for feeling sorry for an opponent that happens to be down. After the attack, all of the Shiftry vaulted into the air and one of them landed, with the others falling into that one's body and them joining back into one Pokemon again. It crossed its fan-leaf hand across its body and closed its eyes as a sign of victory.

May and Combusken were both on the ground, with squiggly marks on their eyes and prone on the ground, indicating that they have lost the battle. May jolted up comically as if she wasn't harmed at all. "What do you think that you're doing, attacking a trainer and a Pokemon while its down?"

"You had to learn it the hard way," said Syrus. "You can't forget that a battle is a battle and there are no exceptions to that one. Think about it; if you were in a Pokemon Contest and you were about to win, and the opponent's Pokemon was down but still up, you wouldn't go easy on it, would you? I heard from you on TV in some Pokemon Contests that you said 'a battle is a battle and if you don't give it your all, then it's an insult to your opponent,' right? You need to remember the things that you say and not forget that other people are going to take those words and utilize them at one point or another, even if it's in a moment that you don't want them to."

May calmed down completely and her eyes almost had tears in them. I can't believe that I could let my lust for some stupid fast food bring me this far . . . so far that I would disrespect my Pokemon, and myself, in order to get it . . . I don't feel like I'm good enough to be a Pokemon Coordinator . . . "You're right and I know that all the things that I did today were wrong, even how I reacted to Drew yesterday when I said that he couldn't lose . . . " May wiped her eyes with her gloves before any tears could drip down. Her eyes were shining bright with good after she held her hands on her fainted Combusken.

"Combusken . . . " the young fowl replied weakly.

May looked at it with one of care. "I'm sorry for all that I put you through today . . . " she took out Combusken's PokéBall. "You deserve a nice long rest," she returned the Pokemon back, with her and the exhausted young fowl smiling at each other, both knowing that she learned something important today.

"I guessed that you took in a vital lesson from today's experience, didn't you May?" asked Syrus.

"Yeah . . . " replied May. "Something that I'm going to have to think to myself for a little while." her little stomach grumbled. "I'm kinda tired form all of that yelling that I did today . . . can I get some . . . "

"Yep," Syrus held out a plate of cheeseburgers.

May ran all the way over to that side to get them, gobbling them up like she did earlier, but showing some gratitude as she did so this time. "Thank you for the cheeseburgers, Syrus! . . . can I get some more?"

Syrus chuckled. "Sure, of course . . . but only if you get to training!" he said that in a friendly way.

[Torchic23]

Wow May sure got fired up, loved that battle, but I can't believe Syrus attacked May and Combusken! In normal Pokemon battles the opponet can't attack the trainer . . .

Anyways, I hardly found any mistakes in these two chapters! Good job! I can't wait to keep reading!

[MiloticSoldier]

Funny! Combusken getting hit by a hose? LOL. I found a mistake. When you put that May laughed, it didn't make sense; this is because it sounds evil. My suggestion is to put May giggled, instead of laughed. You don't have to listen to my critism though.