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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 20, 2006 18:40:00 GMT -5
First Shipping Fic, hope it's good, 1 chapter is short because of my time limit
Rating [for chap.1]: G
Chapter 1 The Beginning
"Blaziken, try another Blaze Kick!" yelled a young girl. Her Blaze pokemon jumped up and furiously kicked through a Raichu, an electric mouse pokemon, with a flaming clawed foot.
The girl flipped her deep brown hair out of her face and put on a smirk. "Finish it Blaziken!" shouted the girl again.
Blaziken grabbed the Raichu and spun it around by its lightning bolt tail and slammed it to the ground. The orange rodent tried desperatly to get back up but eventully fell back to the ground.
A panel of judges were watching the whole battle quietly. The minute the Raichu hit the ground, the judges put X's on a little screen on their stand.
"After another great battle, May and Blaziken win again! That means they'll both go on to the finals!" announced the beautiful announcer, Vivian.
May's sapphire blue eyes seemed to be lost in thought for a moment but then she heard the annoucer and smiled at her well trained fire pokemon.
On another stage, two trainers were also finishing up a battle. A quiet boy and his Flygon would also be going to the next round.
Back on May's stage, May hugged her Blaziken tightly. The soft feathers of her Blaziken made her want to stay in the postition forever. She was proud of her Blaziken for doing so well.
The crowd behind her cheered too, but who wouldn't? Blaziken put on an impressive display!
May exited the stage and went back to the lobby to find out where the next battle was to be held.
"The finals will take place on stage 2, good luck!" said the lady at the front desk.
May walked through the long hallway. She already knew where stage 2 was and wanted to get there quickly.
May was about 15 or 16 years old. She wore a red poke ball bandanna, red T-shirt, black biker shorts, and had a white sweater wrapped around her waist. Also tied to her waist, was a yellow fanny pack in which she used to carry around her ribbons and pokemon. May had experience with contests before, so this one was easy.
May entered stage 2. The ground was dirty from previous battles but you could see a little bit of green peaking out, a panel of judges were on a wall close to her, and all around her was a crowd of cheering fans.
The strange boy came out from the other side of the stage. He had green hair and green eyes. He wore a black long sleeved shirt under a short sleeved purple jacket, and he had light blue jeans.
"We'll put 5 minutes on the clock as always. Now start the match between May and Drew!" called Vivian.
Drew quietly sent out a red and white poke ball. Out of the ball came Flygon, a mighty dragon pokemon. It's red and green scales shone in the bright lights.
May got a little tense, but sent out her poke ball as well. Blaziken came out. It noticed the crowd and decided to show off a little.
Blaziken roared and shot flames out of its wrists. The crowd was impressed by the two strong looking pokemon.
May hesitated at first but then called, "Blaziken, Flamethrower!" Blaziken shot red hot flames out of its beak at Flygon.
Flygon beat its large wings swiftly and rose a few feet in the air and dodged the Flamethrower. "Flygon, Hyper Beam!" Said Drew calmly.
The fighting fowl pokemon took a direct hit and fell to the ground. The score board showed May's points drop dramatically.
May was a little entranced by the boy. He was a little cute and did have an awsome pokemon. "Flygon dodged Blaziken's flamethrower without its trainer's command!" Said May.
Flygon released another Hyper Beam at Blaziken. May's Blaziken tried to dodge, but it was too late and Blaziken fell once again.
"Come on Blaziken! I know you can do it!" May wanted to give Blaziken faith.
Blaziken tried as hard as it could to get back up, but eventually gave up and fainted. Once again, the judges put x's on their screens.
The scoreboard showed Drew and Flygon's picture with the words "WINNER" below.
"Drew and Flygon have won the Abouto contest! Please some accept your ribbons!" exclaimed Vivian.
Drew walked up to Vivian and that's all May got to see. She queitly walked off stage. This was the first contest she had lost in a long time!
Back on the stage, Drew placed a ribbon on Flygon and proudly showed his to the cheering crowd. Drew walked off stage as well and noticed May.
"Nice battle!" Drew complimented with a friendly smile.
"Shut up!" snapped May.
"What a sore loser, besides I've seen a Magikarp fight better than that!" smirked Drew.
May didn't reply, but pouted instead. "You didn't do much better!" pouted May.
"Well at least I won this ribbon," stated Drew and walked out.
May knew she lost because she was thinking more about Drew's looks than his fighting skills.
"Even if that jerk is in the next contest, I know I'll beat him!" said a determined May.
She walked out into the freash air. The contest had gotten her all fired up. May had parked her bike next to the contest hall and went to get it. She wanted to get to the next town.
May got herself on her red bike and began to peddle down the road.
"I wonder if Drew really is in the next contest? I'd really like to see him again." May asked herself. "What am I thinking!! I just met him and now I want to see him again!?" Yelled May slapping herself with her gloved hands.
May forgot that she couldn't ride her bike without using both hands and crashed into a large tree.
"Ow, that really hurt." May whimpered.
"You ok?" Said a familiar voice.
May looked up. It was Drew. He has a worried expression on his face, he had obviously seen May fall.
"Yeah, I'm fine now." said May.
Drew helped her up and got on his green bike and drove away.
"I never knew a guy could be so nice." remarked May a little dumbstruck.
Before she got on her bike again, she looked at her map to see how to get to the next contest.
She got back on her red bike and started riding towards the sunset. She couldn't stop thinking about Drew.
The sun was setting and May knew she would have to try and find a Pokemon Center.
A green and purple tent lie just ahead. May thought she was dreaming, but rode up to the tent.
"Maybe the person in that tent knows where a Pokemon Center is!" exclaimed May.
May rode her bike up to the campsite. A fire still blazed in front of the tent. May parked her bike on a nearby tree, and walked up to the tent.
Chapter 2 May, Blooming flower of love?
Who is in the tent and will May ever find the Pokemon Center? May gets emotions she has never felt before!
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Mar 21, 2006 18:47:13 GMT -5
I remember this from serebii forums. I liked it. The beginning starts with action and desrcibes the setting. Also, a nice technique you used was show, not tell. Liked it! Also, since you already posted this on serebii, you could just copy and paste it. Wants to be on PM list
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Post by Harley Scarow on Mar 22, 2006 15:11:38 GMT -5
It's really nice. I like the way that you used proper grammar when you was writing this instead of me . . . that is ONE habit that I need tattooed into my head . . .
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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 23, 2006 19:39:59 GMT -5
Thanks everyone! Next chapter! Rating: PG [swear words are like this D***] Chapter 2 May, a blooming flower of love? "La, La, La, Da, La, La." hummed a cheerful man. He was preparing to eat his dinner which he had slowley cooked over a fire. He had long purple hair and dressed himself to look like a Cacturne. Pointed green hat, green and black shirt and pants too. He loved Poison and Dark typed pokemon. Cacturne was his favorite. A little bell rang by his bag. "Dinners done Cacturne" Shouted the man. A scary scarecrow cactus pokemon jumped up and ran to the man. The man grabbed a bowl of scolding water, but burned his hand in the process. "Ow ! ! ! Stupid piece of s***!" screamed the man. The bowl he was holding flipped over on Cacturne's head. * * * Outside the purple and green tent, May walked up to the tent flaps. She opened one flap. "Hello? Anyone here?" asked May. "What the h*** you want!" yelled the enraged man holding his burnt hand. "I was hoping you knew where the nearest Pokemon Center was, I'm a coordinator." answered May nervously. "Coodinator? You should have said so sooner!" replied the man. "The name's Harley, come in for a minute!" informed Harley cheerfully. May followed Harley inside the large tent. "So what's your name little missy?" questioned Harley. "Oh, I'm May." "No need to be shy! Sorry about before, had a little cooking accident." May noticed a ticked off Cacturne by a small sink. It had a steaming bowl on its head. The cactus pokemon looked pretty angry. "So anyways, you said you wanted to find a Pokemon Center?" asked Harley. "Yeah." answered May. "Well you're in luck, there happens to be one a few yards ahead of here!" "The sun's just about down, so I better get going now!" May just wanted to get away from the Cacturne. "Hold it! You're a coodinator right?" questioned Harley. His purple eyes looked very truthful at that moment. "Uh, yeah. Why?" asked May. "Well then I guess I see you at the next contest, 'cause I'm a coodinator too!" Harley did an odd little pose. "Oh, that's nice." May said nervously. She ran outside to find her bike missing!! "That's just great!" pouted May. "That guy was kinda weird too, and I'm not going back, so what do I do?" The sun was down, but Harley's campfire still burned brightly. "Well, I have to find my bike, I mean where could it have possibly gone!" wondered May. May searched everywhere around but couldn't find her bike. Tears welled up in her eyes. "I left all my pokemon with my bike!" Then May heard a rustle from a nearby bush. She walked up to the bush and saw some Aipom playing with her bike. "Give it back banana brains!" ordered May. The purple monkey pokemon just laughed and kept on playing. May grabbed a small stone off the dusty ground and threw it at one of the Aipom. The rock hit an Aipom directly in the head. The little monkey turned around and glared at May. "Aipom!" screeched the Aipom May hit. The rest of the Aipom began to throw clumps of sand at May. "Petal Dance!" commanded a voice. A small green pokemon with roses attached to the ends of each of its skinny wrists, jumped out of a nearby tree and shot swirling pink petals at the Aipom. The Aipom were scared and ran down a trail. "You know, there are better ways to fight without Pokemon." said the voice again. May turned to see Drew leaning against a tree. He slowly flipped his green hair with his hand. "Oh yeah?! You got any better ideas?" yelled May. May ran to her bike and got her yellow fanny pack. She strapped it around her waist as if she was prepared for another Aipom attack. "You're lucky I was there to save you." Drew said. "You're lucky I don't hurt you!" yelled an enraged May. "Well, I need to get back to my training, come on Roselia." Drew began to walk down the same trail as the Aipom with Roselia at his side. "What a jerk." stated May. She knew that Drew had saved her, why was she mad? She was more mad at herself foor blowing another chance to learn about this mysterious Drew. May got back on her bike and headed in the direction of the Pokemon Center. Harley's information seemed to be right, the ride to the Pokemon Center was a short one. Once she got there, she rented a room. Then May went to the pokemon hall, a place to let your pokemon out for play while the trainers did something else. There were a few other pokemon in the room already. Flygon, Masquerain, Charizard, and Gardevoir. May threw out her six PokeBalls. First one to come out was her Blaziken. Then Venusaur, Blastoise, Delcatty, Beautifly, and Snorlax. All of her pokemon looked happy to be out of their pokeball and ran to the other pokemon in the room. May walked back out to the main room. A worried Drew threw the doors to the Pokemon Center open. He carried a very exhausted Roselia in his arms. He put it on the desk in front of Nurse Joy. "Please! You've got to help it!" cried Drew. Nurse Joy took a good look at the thorn pokemon. "Our Chansey will heal its wounds and it should be fine!" said Joy. She called her Chansey. The pink egg pokemon ran up and put Roselia on a white hospital cart and carried it to the E.R. May hid a little, if Drew knew she had seen that, she would have never heard the last of it. May had never seen Drew act that way before. He always seemed so calm. May decided to try and forget what just happened as she walked back to her room, but May couldn't help from feeling sorry for Drew and Roselia. May walked back to the Pokemon Hall to check on her pokemon. Just as she opened the door she saw Drew. She closed it to a little peak and watched Drew. "How's your wing feeling Flygon?" asked Drew, petting the Dragon Pokemon. "That means that those other pokemon belong to Drew." said May quietly. "These other pokemon look pretty tough, I wonder who they belong too." Said Drew commenting on May's Pokemon. May leaned on the door a little too hard and it flung open. "May?" Drew had a surprised look. "Oh, uh, hi", May said in a nervous voice. She had fallen into a weird pose and was a little embarresed. "So, do these Pokemon belong to you?" asked Drew. "Yes they do!" said May proudly, remembering Drew's earlier comment. "They look pretty weak to me," smirked Drew. May's jaw dropped. What other things were Drew hiding if he hid the fact that he said May's pokemon looked "tough"? "Uh . . . how's Roselia?" asked May, covering up her feeling offended by Drew's remark. "Why would you care?" grunted Drew rudely. "if that's how you want to be then fine!" May ran to her room. This time May knew she was poilte to the boy and he was mean to her! But still an odd feeling overwhelmed her. Something she had never felt before. It was a good feeling but none she had ever had before. The feeling was, love. Chapter 3 Hurry May! Save Roselia! Roselia is seriously injured and Drew disappears! Can May save Roselia?
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Post by Harley Scarow on Mar 23, 2006 20:22:31 GMT -5
I love your stories. It uses terms other than ''said'', which is something that the people of my class are cursed with saying. Oh yeah, I forgot to mention to you that being the Cipher Bodyguard is a higher rank than Moderator.
I don't know what MiloticSoldier did. Can you make boards on this forum? If you can't, then tell me.
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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 23, 2006 20:30:52 GMT -5
I don't think so. I don't really know what I can do! Is there a special page or something? It's really nice of you to do that though, thanks!
I guess I'll post the next chapter, I don't think there's any more reviewers
Rating: PG
Chapter 3 Hurry May! Save Roselia!
May sat on a bed in the room she had rented for the night.
She had put on her night outfit, a yellow shirt and a fleece pair of blue pants.
She took her bandana out and combed her hair straight. Her gloves lie on a nightstand next to her bed.
"Why would he be so mean? I was worried about his stupid Pokemon!" yelled May. "And he said my Pokemon were weak! What nerves!" She then decided to get a glass of water for bed. She walked through the main hallway and past the E.R. rooms.
In one room was Drew's exhausted Roselia. It looked like it was having much trouble breathing as a Chansey watched over it.
"I hope it's ok, come to think of it, Drew never did tell me what happened." May said in a low voice.
She continued walking down the hall to get her glass of water. When she returned, she walked past Roselia again.
A bright red light was flashing in the room as a flushed looking Chansey rushed out the door.
May looked a little closer at the little table where Roselia had been, and found it gone!
"Oh no, what happened to Roselia?" panicked May.
"The only reason I'm worried is because it's a Pokemon!" May lied to herself.
She ran to Drew's room to tell him what happened. She flung open the door and started shouting, "DREW! ROSELIA IS MISSING!"
Then she realized that Drew was not in the room. The sheets on his bed were ruffled as if he had already been there.
May rushed all through the Pokemon Center looking for Drew, but he was nowhere to be found. "Maybe Roselia went outside and Drew followed." May convinced herself. Her brown hair was messy and her deep sapphire eyes glowed with fear.
May ran up to the main desk. "Nurse Joy, where's Drew and Roselia!" May asked loudly.
"My Chansey has informed me that Roselia has disappeared, as for the boy, he should be in his room." assured Joy.
"He's not! And I don't think he knows about Roselia!"
"Now calm down, go back to your bed, I'm sure they'll both turn up in the morning."
Joy lead May back to her room and locked the door. May sat on her bed, thinking of what to do.
May then got an idea and looked towards the window. "That's it! I'm coming Drew!" exclaimed May.
She put back on her normal clothes and ran towards the window. With much strength, May opened the window and climbed out.
May ran back towards the forest. "Drew! Roselia! Where are you guys!" called May. "I can't believe I'm worried about that jerk! It's not like I love him or anything!" May thought to herself.
Just then May saw a bloody trail shining in the moonlight. "Oh no, I've got a bad feeling about this." May gulped.
She began to follow the trail nervously. "This is creepy, but I really hope Drew and Roselia are ok." Said May nervously.
All of a sudden, she saw a thorny figure in the moonlight. May cautiously ran up to it. It was a Cacturne and something seemed familer about it. May noticed an evil grin on its face. It's scary yellow eyes glowed brightly.
A few feet away lie Roselia, with cuts and bruises all over. But it wasn't bleeding, so what made the trail?
"Is Cacturne able to make fake blood?" May asked herself.
The Cacturne started shooting poison spikes at May. She just barely by dive jumping. She fell right next to the injured rose pokemon.
"Roselia . . . " May cried.
Just then, Cacturne ran towards a dark tree at the edge of the forest. May grabbed Roselia and ran after the Cacturne.
On the other side of the tree trunk was Drew. He was unconcious and tied to the tree. He had many cuts and was losing blood rapidly.
"Drew!" May screamed horrified.
The Cacturne prepared a Pin Missile and aimed at Drew. The spikes shot out of its pointy arms rapidly.
May jumped in front of Drew and got hit by the attack. May knew that if Drew took one more attack he'd be finished.
May just layed on the ground, almost to weak to move.
"Crap, I left my pokemon back at the Pokemon Center." cried May.
May looked back up at Drew. She wondered how all this had happened but especially how a Cacturne tied Drew to the tree, or did someone else?
Then the Cacturne began another Pin Missile, this time at Roselia. The flower was just barely breathing. One more attack would kill it.
May got up and rammed into the Cacturne as hard as possible. The spikes hurt her but she didn't care. The only thing on her mind was Drew.
May fell to the ground unconcious. The Cacturne fell too. It jumped back up and stared at the fallen girl.
The sun slowly started to rise. Cacturne tried to sheild itself from the bright light and gave up. It ran swiftly back into the dark of the forest.
May, Roselia, and Drew were all unconsious.
Officer Jenny pulled up in her motorcycle. "The Pokemon got away again, but we found some kids!" called Jenny into her radio.
She untied Drew from the tree, and with some help from her Growlithe team, put the injured kids on the motocycle and sped towards the Pokemon Center.
Next chapter: Chapter 4 When Shadow turns to sun! Pokemon and Human revival! As May begins to learn more about Drew, Drew starts to become a different kind of person, and the relationship gets a little deeper.
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Mar 23, 2006 21:00:56 GMT -5
Very emotional with May trying to save Drew and Roselia. Very detailed on the bloody trail thingie. Good work.
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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 24, 2006 16:00:46 GMT -5
Thank you! Here's the next chapter, and the last one until Sunday! Rating: G Chapter 4 When Shadow turns to sun! Pokemon and Human revival! May opened her deep sapphire blue eyes. All around her were white walls and bright lights. "Where am I?" May sat upright. She looked behind her and saw a white hospital bed. Suddenly, a Chansey ran in happily. "Chansey!" exclaimed May. She was happy to see another living creature. The Chansey called Nurse Joy. Joy ran in to see May, her orange locks flowing wildly behind her. "Oh, I'm so glad you're ok!" exclaimed Joy. "What happened?" asked May. "We found you and another boy at the edge of the forest!" "Drew! Is he alright?" May asked anxiously. "He hasn't woken up yet, but he is going to be all right thanks to you." said Joy. "And . . . I'm sorry I didn't believe you before . . . " "You mean he's all right! I was worried!" "Of course, you can't get out of bed for awhile, you are not fully healed yet." Joy was worried about May's welfare. "Oh man, how is Roselia doing?" asked May. "Just fine! It has fully recovered and is by its trainer's bedside as we speak!" Said Joy. "Now please rest, you need it after all those injuries!" "Oh ok." May pulled a green blanket back over her head and fell back into a deep sleep. In the room where Drew was, Roselia watched nervously. Drew's eyes were tightly shut and his body was still. A few bandages covered his arms that lie over his blanket. "Rose, Rose!" cried the worried Pokemon. A Chansey nearby reassured it that everything was going to be just fine. Roselia watched its unconscious trainer. Its eyes welled up with tears just at the thought of everything that had happened a few nights before. As for Drew, he lied in a deep sleep. He was dreaming about a girl with brown hair and sapphire eyes. She had brought him joy and he dreamed of spending lots of time with the girl. Who was this girl? She seemed very familiar in some other strange world . . . The next day, May awoke with a start. Joy was already in her room. "Good morning May! Did you sleep well?" smiled Joy. "Yeah, I guess." answered May. "Your friend still hasn't awoke yet, but I do have good news! You are fully healed and may get out of bed and do as you wish!" Joy said cheerfully. "Well, I'm going to go see Drew!" exclaimed May. "Please go back to your other room first and change back into your clothes." May looked down at herself. She had a white shirt with white flannel pants on and her hair was combed straight without her bandanna. "Uh, ok." May ran to her other room. Her normal clothes were already waiting for her. She quickly changed and ran up to a Chansey wandering the halls. "Can you show me to Drew's room?" asked May. The pink egg Pokemon smiled, nodded, and ran off. May followed it swiftly. The Chansey then put its hand to it's mouth, as to tell her to be quiet. May nodded and quietly followed the Chansey to a door. May quietly pushed open the door and walked in. Drew still lie in his bed with Roselia asleep at his side. "Roselia!" May said quietly. Drew looked almost as if he was enjoying the deep sleep. Roselia shared his expression of happiness. Drew's dream only got better and better . . . * * * * * * * * "So Drew, where do you want to go today?" said a cheerful girl. "I dunno, you choose today!" Drew said, smiling. The brown haired girl smiled and flipped a strand of Drew's green hair out of his face. The two lie in a peaceful meadow filled with ever blooming pink flowers and warm sunshine. "I found this flower for you, I think it's rare." He handed her a purple flower that stuck out among the pink flowers around them. "Oh Drew! It's beautiful!" exclaimed the girl as she gazed at the flower. The girl's sapphire blue eyes glowed with joy as they stared into each other's eyes. "Oh Drew! You're so charming!" "I feel . . . " started Drew. "Feel what? What's wrong?" asked the girl. "I feel as if I knew you from somewhere before, in another world, another life . . . " continued Drew. The girl chuckled and gave Drew a little kiss, making him blush a little but then looked serious again. "I feel as if someone out there is missing me, I want to see that person again." said Drew. "Who is it?" asked the girl. "I can't exactly remember the details but . . . " "Ooo, please tell me Drew! I want to know all about this other person you know!" squealed the girl, her brown hair jumped a little bit and her deep sapphire eyes glowed with excitement. "Well, if you really must know, she was a girl, who looked much like you, brown hair, sapphire eyes, good natured . . . " "Really! She sounds nice! What's her name?" exclaimed the girl. "I . . . I can't remember, but I guess it doesn't matter much now . . . " said Drew gloomily. "Drew, does that mean that if I ever went away, you'd just forget me?" The girl said with a serious look in her sapphire eyes. "No, of course not, and what makes you think I'd leave you?" chuckled Drew. "Oooo, I just love it when you smile Drew! It makes me happy too!" "But, I do wish I could meet that other girl again . . . someday . . . " * * * * * * * * May watched as Drew's expressions changed while he was unconscious. "I wonder if he's dreaming now." said May. "I don't think I dreamed of anything or if it's possible but who knows . . . " After awhile, May got bored and started squeaking her sneakers together. Roselia woke up and looked at her. "Oh, sorry Roselia! I didn't mean to wake you!" May had an embarrassed look on her face. But instead of angry, the Pokemon smiled at her. Even though May didn't know it, Roselia really trusted her for saving Drew. Roselia really cared about Drew. Roselia had been with Drew since the beginning of its life. * * * * * * * * A young green haired boy sat under a bush to cover himself from the rain. The sky was a deep gray, and no one was around for miles except the boy. He had a saddened look in his green eyes as he stared down a muddy trail by the bush he was under. The rain was starting to flood holes on the trail and the water level would soon reach the boy's make-shift umbrella. Then he saw the whole sky turn from gray to pitch black. He jumped up and ran to the source of the darkness. Behind a larger bush than the one the boy had been under, was a Duskull. A baby Roselia lie just ahead of it. THe Duskull shot Shadow Ball after Shadow Ball at it. The baby rose pokemon looked weak from all the hits it had taken. The young boy couldn't stand to see the Duskull hurt the baby any longer. "Stop it! Stop hurting that pokemon! Why do you have to do that!" screamed the boy. "Who are you?" the Pokemon asked in telepathy. "My name is Drew! I won't stand here and let you hurt that pokemon!" yelled young Drew. The injured Roselia watched Drew. It was impressed by the boy's bravery and was glad he was there to save it. "Fine then! You fight me now!" yelled the ghost. Drew rammed into the ghost with all his might. The Pokemon disappeared and reappeared a few feet away. "I waste no time on weaklings!" smirked the Duskull and teleported away. Drew stared at the spot where the Duskull had been and ran over to the baby Roselia. "Are you going to be ok?" asked Drew, worried. The Roselia smiled weakly and simply replied, "Rose!" Drew knew from the pokemon's look, that it meant "I want to come with you and fight by your side." Roselia fainted as Drew picked it up. Drew grabbed a PokeBall out of his bag and put the Roselia in it. He had never wanted a Pokemon and simply used the PokeBall for fun, but the Roselia was different. Young Drew walked down the muddy tail into the distance. * * * * * * * * May looked hard into the Pokemon's eyes. "Rose!" The rose Pokemon yawned. May then stared at Drew. "Please be okay, for Roselia, and me . . . " said May softly. Roselia still looked a little thoughtful from remembering how it met Drew. "Rose! elia!" exclaimed the pokemon pointing at May's ribbon case sticking out of her fanny pack. "Oh, my ribbons! You want to see them?" The little rose pokemon nodded and jumped up. May opened her case to show Roselia her ribbons. "I have only one right now, but I have participated in the Grand Festival before, and I even won once!" explained May. Roselia jumped in excitement. Drew stirred a bit, which attracted Roselia and May's attention. Drew's green eyes were still tightly shut. * * * * * * * * "Drew, ever since you thought about that other girl, you haven't been the same!" yelled the girl. ''I told you, I want to see her again, know her name . . . but I can't figure out how!" yelled Drew. "I am sorry to make you upset . . . " said the girl sadly. "It's not you . . . " "How can I help? I just want to see you happy, even if it means leaving you," The girl's sapphire eyes looked sad but Drew could tell she just wanted to help. "How? How can I get out of this meadow?" asked Drew sadly. " I never want to have to leave you, and I will return someday!" The girl sighed, "This world is a paradise. created in your imagination. You fell into a deep sleep somehow, and dreamed all this land up. You simply must wake yourself up." "No! It can't be! I changed my mind! I'm not leaving you! I love you!" screamed Drew with tears in his eyes. "Drew . . . you have to go back to your real world, it does exist. The other girl you mentioned, she's probably real too and you need to go back to her!" said the girl gloomily. "But --" said Drew but got cut off. "Drew! You have to stop dreaming! The real world is more important than your dreams! Now go!" The girl's sapphire eyes were tearful as well but she wanted the best for Drew. "Remember Drew, no matter where you go, I'll always be there, in your imagination, if this other girl is like me, you'll always be happy." "But, how do I get back?" asked Drew. "Hold my hand, I shall help you!" Drew put his hand up to hers. Her hand felt soft, like a Skitty. Suddenly, the whole world and the girl glowed with blue light. "Good-bye Drew! In your other world, the girl you really love awaits!" Said the girl as she slowly disappeared as well as the whole meadow of flowers. * * * * * * * * Drew strirred a bit more, and finally opened his eyes. "Drew! You're ok! I was so worried!" exclaimed May and gave him a big hug. "What the . . . " Drew was staring at May. "Oh, erm, it was only a get-well-soon hug!" said May blushing. "Right . . . where's Roselia?" questioned Drew. Drew couldn't remember anything that happened in his dream, and still couldn't remember the girl that had just given him a hug or her name. "Right over there!" exclaimed May and pointed at Drew's cheering Roselia. "Excuse me but, what's your name again?" asked Drew. "May! How could you forget?" Just then, all of Drew's memories of May came back to him. "Oh yeah! I guess I was sleeping too hard." chuckled Drew. The two kids laughed together, finally reunited. Next chapter: Chapter 5 Bokuto contest of love! May and Drew have finally reached the next contest hall where they both hoped to earn a ribbon. A familer rival appears as Drew remembers a horrifying memory comes back to him!
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Post by Harley Scarow on Mar 24, 2006 17:49:30 GMT -5
Yet another good story that you have made. I like the way that you make up your own Pokemon concepts rather than take something that already exists and use that. Originality goes a long way, at least in my book it does.
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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 28, 2006 18:25:51 GMT -5
Thank you Wobbuffet, and with that, I give you the next chapter:
Chapter 5 Bokuto Contest of love!
Drew walked down a trail though a thick forest towards the next town. His mind was buzzing with strategys for the next contest. May walked a few feet behind him.
"Why are you following me!" Drew yelled at May. "I dunno, aren't you going to the next contest? I don't know where it's at, so I followed you!"
"I know you have a map! So what's your real reason for following me!" said Drew annoyed.
"Ok, I was wondering if we could travel Hoenn together!" May asked shyly.
"What!? No way!" answered Drew.
"But, why not?" May whined.
"Cause I don't need girlfriend yet!" answered Drew.
"Huh?" May stopped.
"Oh, er I meant I don't need a friend." replied Drew nervously.
"Why not? Everyone needs a friend!"
"I don't!" answered Drew stubbornly.
"Please!!!" whined May loudly.
"Oh, ok, but you better keep up with me!" smirked Drew. Drew knew he really did want May to travel with him, but he couldn't bring himself to admit it.
"Yay!! I can keep up!" May was happy that Drew would even let her near him. She was acting very childish today. She was excited to see Drew still alive after the Cacturne incident.
"You do know we have the next contest soon right?" asked Drew.
"Duh, you'd have to be a Slowbro not to know that!" replied May.
Drew flipped his hand through his green hair. "May! You didn't tell me you were a Pokemon! "
I'm not stupid!" explained May, she didn't quite get his sarcasm.
"Well then I'd expect you know the next contest is in Bokuto Town right?"
"Of course I do!" May didn't really know but she didn't want to sound stupid.
"Kuto in ancient Hoenn langauge means "love" and Bo means "young"." explained Drew.
"What's your point?"
"It means, in the next contest, only coordinators 25 and under may enter, and it's double battling, but it has to be with the opposite sex." explained Drew.
May was speechless. She clasped her gloved hands to her face. "Do I have to be paired with Drew?" She thought to herself.
Drew smiled and chuckled a bit at her lost expression.
"So what Pokemon are we going to use?" Smiled Drew.
"Ah! Partners?" asked May in surprise.
"May, I don't love you, I just want to enter this contest and win ok?" Drew was trying to assure the young girl.
"Um, okay I guess." May's face turned red in embarrasment.
"Look! Straight aheadd, there's Bokuto Town!" Exclaimed Drew. He took off in the direction of some large buildings.
"Hey! Wait up!" called May and ran after him. She lost her bike awhile ago and still wasn't used to so much walking. She closed her sapphire eyes and ran with all her might. Unfortunatly, Drew had stopped at a skinny cliff over looking a grassy meadow with a path that lead to the city.
May accidentally crashed into Drew and they both tumbled off the cliff. May landed on top of Drew.
"Oh er, sorry about that!" May apologized quickly and jumped off. Her pale face turned into a deep red blush. She had to admit, it was kinda nice.
"What the h*** was that for?" cursed Drew in surprise, it seemed he even enjoyed the fall.
"It was an accident! I was running and a closed my eyes and . . . " May rambled on.
"It's ok . . . " Drew softly said. "Are you ok?"
"Oh, yeah I'm fine, but we should hurry to that contest!" May was trying to get off the subject.
"Oh, sure, let's go," Drew walked quietly.
There was long grassy trail ahead and it would take some time for the two to get to the end of it. A few short trees were scattered throughout the meadow and there wasn't a living soul to be found except for May and Drew.
"This path seems to go forever!" May whined.
"This is the perfect oppertunity to have fun! Try and catch me!" Drew challenged and ran down the path.
"Wow he's weird," stated May. She giggled and chased after him. The two played until they could hardly walk. "I'm tired now, we may not make it to the next town."
"Shut your trap, if you keep whining, we'll never get there!" Snapped Drew.
A few more boring hours later, Drew and May arrived in Bokuto City.
"Look at all the clothing and jewlery stores!" May squealed.
Drew rolled his eyes and walked towards the Bokuto Contest Hall. "Come on May, we need to sign up for this contest!" He yelled at her.
May ran up to his side. "Heh, sorry . . . "
Drew pushed open the doors of the hall, which were shaped like hearts. He walked up to a lady at a desk. "We'd like to enter this contest . . . " Drew explained and handed the woman May's contest pass and his.
"Aww, what a cute couple!" squealed the woman as she scanned the cards in her computer.
"We're not . . . " May started, but Drew put his hand over her mouth.
"Just in time! You just got the last space for this contest!" explained the woman.
"Now go down that hall over there with the Luvdisc sign, and you'll find the coordinator's lobby!" the woman was pointing at the left side of the main room.
Drew pulled May down the hall as she rambled on about, "We don't like each other! We wouldn't make a good couple!" she had her arms folded tightly around her chest.
"May, stop thinking about that, we need a good strategy!" scolded Drew.
Drew pushed open a door that said "Coordinator's lobby". Inside were couples kissing on the benches and doing other love related activites. May scanned the pink and purple room, then she saw Harley.
"You're actually here Harley, who are you with?" asked May rushing over to Harley.
"Oh, May, this Carly!" Harley was pointing over to a mean looking lady. She had long curly blond hair and was wearing a white tank top, green pants and purple flip flops. She smacked some pink bubble gum in her mouth.
"She has green pants! She's perfect for me!" squealed Harley. "And who are you with, May? "I came with a friend, Drew," She told Harley cheerfully and pointed at Drew who was staring at one of his pokeballs on a nearby bench.
Harley's eyes got an evil look in them when he saw Drew. "Yuck, why are you dating that loser?"
"He's not a loser!" yelled May, standing up for Drew.
"Whatever, now come on Carla, it's out turn to appeal!" Harley grabbed the girl's butt as they walked out to the main stage.
May and Drew watched eagerly on a screen in the lobby, heat shaped of course. "We're almost finished with appeal rounds! Now it's Carla and Harley's turn! Remember folks, every couple must show love in their appeal!" explained Vivian.
Carla sent out a Fearow and Harley sent out his Banette. "Banette, do a heart shaped Will O Wisp!" ordered Harley. His possessed doll pokemon jumped up and blue flames appeared around it. It threw it's flames together which created a firey blue heart.
Next, Carla's Fearow weaved threw the blue heat and made an arrow. "What an amazing appeal!" Vivian announced again.
Harley snickered, "Easy!"
As the "so-called" couple walked off stage, Vivian called, "Up next, May and her partner, Drew!"
May and Drew walked up the steps of the stage. They were the only team to come out not holding hands. May quickly grasped Drew's hand as they walked to center stage.
"Now, what appeal will Drew and May use?" exclaimed Vivian.
"Hmm, go Beautifly!" Called May. A sparkling butterfly pokemon emerged from the PokeBall she threw.
"Beautifly, eh? Go Masquerain!" said Drew as he threw his PokeBall. The pokeball released a white butterfly pokemon with orange wings.
"Silver Wind!" both coordinators called. The butterflies were at different sides of the room as they shot out Silver waves through the air at the ground. The curvy waves made a heart shape on the floor, the heart shape on the floor sparkled with elegance.
The people in the crowd cheered really loud, and Vivian was amazed, "How incredible!" When the appeal was over, May and Drew bowed and walked back to the lobby. On the screen where they had watched Harley, it now showed the two teams that advanced.
"We made it!" May squealed. "It wasn't that hard." Said Drew flipping through his hair. "Harley and Carla made it too! Looks like we're gonna have some tough opponents tomorrow!" stated May.
"Yeah . . . " mumbled Drew. He stared at May closely with his deep green eyes. He had seen that man, Harley, somewhere before.
Next chapter Chapter 6 To win an an impossible fight! Bokuto contest finals! Drew remembers something horrifying about Harley, and the battle gets a heck of a lot tougher! Can Drew face his deepest fear and help May win the fight?
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Post by Harley Scarow on Mar 28, 2006 23:11:36 GMT -5
I know that I should have asked your permission before doing so but . . . I edited your stories to get rid of the mistakes.
Here are the mistakes that I have found:
-Diolouge errors -Spelling errors
Yeah . . . when you make a character say diolouge, you don't put two people in the same diolouge paragraph, since that gets some people confused.
When you write diolouge leading, like said, shout, or whispered, you don't have to capitalize the first letter.
The storylines for your ContestShipping is completely original, which is something that I love more than anything. I do love the stories that you write though, and I think that they would be good if they were on TV.
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Post by Torchic23 on Mar 30, 2006 19:38:00 GMT -5
Aww, thanks! I feel all special now ^^
Yeah, there's quite a few mistakes and I just don't think this story is the best it can be. I'm not going to continue it on serebii, but I'll post the other chapters here still
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 6, 2006 0:54:50 GMT -5
Chapter 6 To win an an impossible fight! Bokuto contest finals! "Which team of coordinator couples will win the Bokuto ribbon? We'll see in this match between May, Drew, Harley, and Carla!" Shouted Vivian. May smirked and Drew looked confident as usaull, while Harley glared at Drew with evil eyes and Carla put on lipstick. "Beautifly!" May shouted as she threw a pokeball. "Go Masquerain!" shouted Drew as he fiercely threw his pokeball. Carla tossed out a Seviper. Harely continued to watch Drew. "I'll get you! And you're really gonna be sorry for what you did earlier!" Harley thought to himself. Carla elbowed him in the side hard. "And I know just how to get my revenge," finished Harley as he sent out Cacturne. Harley gave his pokemon an evil smile. The Cacturne nodded and pretended to shoot at Masquerain but planned to hit Drew instead. Drew had lost all his memories from the day a Cacturne nearly killed him, so didn't seem to notice the attack. "Urgh, Beautifly! Silver Wind!" May shouted. She knew what the Cacturne was doing. "Cacturne, Sandstorm!" shouted Harley. "Wait, Cacturne can't use Sandstorm!" Drew pointed out. "Well mines can! Looks like the little boy didn't do his homework again! Ha ha ha!" laughed Harley. The Sandstorm didn't come close to Beautifly, it hit May instead and blinded her. Her brown hair whipped in front of her face as she struggled for a breath. She choked on the whirling sand. Harley knew that she knew what he was doing and didn't want her to get in the way. "Harley! What are you doing?" screamed Carla. She was very mean natured but even she couldn't bare to watch the young girl suffer. "Don't interfere Carla!" chuckled Harley. "And now, Cacturne, use your Pin Missile on the boy!" Screamed Harley. The evil cactus sent out poison needles right at Drew. Drew was watching May struggle in the twister and he turned around to see Pin Missle coming at him. Then, at that very moment, he remembered everything that happened the night he was so badly injured. * * * Drew sat atop a tree branch and watched the full moon. He sighed as he thought about his injured Roselia back at the Pokemon Center. "Roseil!" a Pokemon called. Drew looked down at the ground and saw his rose pokemon standing below the branch he was on. "Roselia! You're supposed to be healing at the Pokemon Center!" he scolded. A worried look came over his pale face. Drew jumped off the branch and landed perfectly in front of Roselia. He picked up the flower in his arms and climbed back up to the tree branch. "Just look at that moon Roselia!" he said happily. "If only I could bring May here to see it," he started. "Rose?" asked Roselia. "No! Are you crazy! I don't like her!" shouted Drew. Just then Drew heard a scream. He and Roselia jumped of the branch and ran towards the scream. There was a large tree. A man dressed like a Cacturne leaned against the tree trunk. He had pinned a Tailow to a tree and was punching it for fun. "Leave that pokemon alone!" shouted Drew. The man turned hs face to Drew, it was Harley! "And why should I?" Said Harley as he punched the pokemon once again. "Leave it alone! Go pick on someone your on size!" Drew yelled. "I can do what I want, and some little brat like you isn't going to get in my way!" he yelled. Drew had left all his other pokemon back at the Pokemon Center and he didn't want to risk hurting his Roselia anymore. Drew flung himself at Harley. He managed to get Harley to let go of the Tailow which then flew away. Harley grabbed Drew by the neck and punched in the stomache. He then slashed at places all over Drew's body. Drew felt weak but still tried to fight back. Harley dragged Drew to an even larger tree. Behind him, he left puddles of blood which Roselia followed. Once the rose caught up to them, Harley had now pinned Drew to a tree. He sent out Cacturne and the Cacturne's eyes glowed brightly. In a full moon Cacturne are very powerful. "How perfect . . . " Chuckled Harley. "Urgh, help . . . " cried Drew weakly. "No one can save you now ! ! " screamed Harley. He threw Drew down to the ground and grabbed a rope out of his bag. He pinned Drew to the tree again and tied the rope on too. Drew was to weak to fight back and just allowed Harley to tie him to the tree. ''I'm going to let Cacturne finish this one! And maybe you'll let me kill a pokemon the next time, that is, if you live!" yelled Harley and ran into the thick woods leaving only his Cacturne behind. The Cacturne peirced Drew's body over and over again with Pin Missles. Then Roselia jumped in and protected Drew from at least 5 attacks. "Roseila . . . no . . . " moaned Drew weakly, there was nothing he could do to stop it because he was still tied to the tree. Roselia gave up and fainted. Then Cacturne slammed into Drew and made him unconsious as well. * * * Drew watched in horror as the Pin Missile was about to hit him, but Masquerain jumped in a used Bubble to knock the glowing missles down. "Thanks Masquerain!" Drew smiled at his pokemon. May was finally freed from the sand twister. "Beautifly, Silver Wind that Cacturne!" May yelled with anger. Silver Wind hit Cacturne hard but it got back up. Oficer Jenny and Vivian tried to run up to Harley, but he thrust them back with his arm. He jumped over to May and Drew's side a grabbed May by the neck and jumped back over to his side. "Let her go!" yelled Drew. "Let's not make this like the forest inncident!" Chuckled Harley. May struggled in his arms but couldn't break free. "Seviper, Poison Tail!" commanded Carla suddenly. The snake's tail glowed purple as it smacked it against Cacturn's face and knocked it Cacturne out. "Carla? Why?" asked a puzzled Harley. "I can't watch you hurt other people and pokemon! I hate you!" Screamed Carla as she returned Seviper to its pokeball and ran away. Drew slammed into Harley hard. May fell out of his arms and into Drew's. She was unconsious and luckily still alive. Harley got back up but Officer Jenny came behind him and put handcuffs on his wrists. "D*** you! D*** you all! I'll get you back! I will!" Shouted Harley as Jenny took him away. Drew gently srtoked May's hair and clasped her hand tightly. "May . . . " said Drew softly. She slowly woke up to find her head lying in Drew's lap. She swiftly sat up. "Drew! What happened?" asked May. "Officer Jenny got 'em! And you're ok too!" said Drew happily. "And you?" asked May. "Not a scratch!" answered Drew. He gave her such a warm smile, one she had never seen before. Vivian ran up to the two. "I think you two deserve these ribbons." she said softly. She handed them both a pink ribbon. "I'm sorry for the battle mix up . . . " apologized Vivian. May and Drew walked outside the contest hall."I should have never trusted Harley . . . " admitted May quietly. "What really happened the night with the Cacturne?" asked May. Drew told her the story with every detail. "How could you forget that?" questioned May. "I dunno, being unconsious must have messed with my memory or something . . . " The two walked through another quiet forest path talking togther. They both had two ribbons now on their journey through Hoenn.
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Post by Harley Scarow on Apr 9, 2006 20:34:21 GMT -5
I kind of feel sorry for that Taillow that got roughed up . . . Great story! I fixed the mistakes for you.
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 13, 2006 23:46:22 GMT -5
Oh thanks WobbuffetDS, your story is about perfect so I think it's only best you help me as well ^^;
Anyhow next chapter
Rating: PG [Swear Words]
Chapter 7 Sableye surprise!
Drew and May walked slowly through a wispy forest, almost all the tree's had no leaves, it was fall.
The colorful leaves that littered the ground crunched under Drew and May's feet.
Drew had not talked to May since they had left Bokuto Town. Every once in a while, May would open her mouth to speak, but then stop herself.
May's pretty blue eyes looked ever hopeful that Drew would eventully say something, to reassure her she wasn't alone.
Drew stared the ground queitly. He didn't even try to look at May once.
Finally May got tired on waiting for Drew to say something and blurted out, "Why won't you talk?!"
For the first time in hours, Drew lifted his head to look at her. A gentle breeze blowing through the leafless forest blew his green hair around a bit.
"And why should I talk?" Said Drew smirking.
"Well! Because . . . uh . . . " Said May.
"Ah hah! There's no good reason!" Drew stated and went back to quietly staring at the tan brown trail they were walking upon.
May scowled at his remark, but realized there was nothing she had to say to him anyways.
May stared at him as they walked along for another few minutes, but got bored quickly and pulled out her contest guide.
"Ah, the next contest is in Iokota City! It says here that they're famous for having high tech contests!" said May excitedly.
"Looks like you need to study your contests more."
"What do ya mean?! I already know about all the contests!"
"Don't you have the contests memorized by now? Any real coordinator would have known every contest hall by heart," said Drew flicking his hand through his hair.
"Shut up! I don't need to hear your bragging!" yelled May who was red-faced.
Drew smiled at her and murmed something very softly that sounded like, "She's so cute when she's angry."
The bright orange sun was slowley disappearing over the horizen, which could be easily seen through all the dead trees.
"Ok, I don't like dark, let's set up camp!" suggested May nervously.
"Aww, afraid the boogy man is gonna get ya?" Drew smirked sarcastically.
"Argh, shut up!"
Drew and May set up their camp for the night. The sun was almost fully down.
"Make fire!" Said May and threw two sticks which hit Drew directly in the forehead.
"You do it! And watch where you throw those sticks!" Drew was rubbing his head.
"Oh, you wouldn't honestly expect a poor innocent girl like me to make a fire?" May had her best impression of puppy-dog eyes.
"Oh fine whatever . . ."
Drew began to rub the two flimsy sticks together with all his might. He rubbed harder and harder until his face strained and the sticks broke.
May giggled from inside her Torchic themed tent. Drew turned around at her, his expression was quite funny to May.
"It's not funny! Why don't you try it Miss Perfect!" Yelled Drew.
May walked over to the logs and the broken stick bits. She kneeled down, grabbed some of the larger broken stick peices and began to rub them together over the fire.
Within a minute, a fire had sprouted from the two sticks.
"Arrg! How did you do that!" Drew was stunned at the way that May did that.
"Have I already told you this? Girls are just naturally better!"
She secretly hid a match in her hand so Drew wouldn't know anything. Drew grumbled a bit but then said, "Why don't we let the Pokemon get some exercise?"
He threw out his three Poke Balls. Roselia came out of the first one, then Masquerain, and finally Flygon.
May let out her Pokemon too, but all the Pokemon seemed to enjoy the crisp evening breeze that blowed through the small forest.
"Know how to cook?" Asked May.
"Uh, no you?" Replied Drew.
"Just try it! I bet you're a great cook, you just haven't realized it! I've got some supplies in my bag!" Said May excitedly.
She ran into her tent and came out with loads of ingredients. Drew nervously looked at the pile of food.
''Uh...what do you want me to make?" asked Drew.
"Ooo, surprise me!" May ran into her tent with her Delcatty.
"Oh great" mumbled Drew. "How'd I get myself into this job . . . ?"
About an hour later, Drew stared at the dinner he had cooked. It was in ball form and was brown, it almost looked like mud balls that he had seen people put in secret bases.
"Er . . . May . . . dinner's done."
May sprang out of her tent over to Drew. She looked carfully at what he had made.
Drew stared at her twisted expression. He could just imagine her yelling at him for the poor job he had done.
May gave the food a wide smile and said, "Looks delicious!"
Drew stared at her in amazment. May quickly grabbed a plastic plate from her tent and plopped the brown blobs onto her plate.
Within minutes, all the food [or whatever it was Drew had created] was gone.
May simply smiled and said, "It's the best thing ever tasted! Told ya you were a great cook!"
Drew sighed but smiled a little, he felt happy to make May happy. By this time, the sun was completely down, the only light came from a few stars and a small slit of the moon.
The tall outlines of the dead trees stood out especially. May tremebled a but and ran into her tent with her Pokemon. Blastoise and Venusaur slept outside the tent, but May snuggled up close to her Blaziken and Delcatty.
Drew slept in a small green and purple sleeping bag by the warm fire.
About midnight, a strange purple Pokemon with jeweled eyes climbed through the tree branches near the camp.
It noticed the glowing fire and curiously jumped from the tree down to the camp.
The strange purple creature stuck out a clawed hand into the fire. It pulled it back quickly because of the heat in the fire hurt it.
It turned around and saw Drew. "Sableye . . . " screeched the mysterious Pokemon.
The Saybleye stared at Drew for a long time with it's large blue jeweled eyes, but it eventually got bored and noticed May's tent.
The Sableye crawled swiftly to the tent, careful not to wake the sleeping Pokemon just outsid of it.
The purple Pokemon jumped on May's tent and crawled all over it to examine it. It apparently was so loud, that May was awakened quickly.
May saw a strange shadow crawling all over her tent. May let out a peircing scream in fright which woke Drew up too.
The Sableye was examining the back of the tent, so Drew didn't see what had scared May.
He slowly got out of his sleeping bag and walked towards May's tent to find out what was wrong.
May busted out of her tent and bumped into Drew. She was only half awake, and didn't notice that she fell back asleep in Drew's arms.
Drew blushed as he stared at May, but his happy feelings were quickly destroyed as the curious Sableye came out from behind the tent laughing to itself.
Drew was frozen in his place as the weird Saybleye climbed back up a tree and out of sight.
The next morning, May awoke in Drew's arms by the fire, or at least what was left of it.
She jumped up quickly and tried to hide her blushing because Drew awoke too.
"What the h*** happened last night?!" Demanded May.
Drew slowly got up from his sleeping postion and simply said with a handsome smile, "I don't remember . . . "
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Post by Harley Scarow on Apr 14, 2006 0:11:12 GMT -5
What I would suggest is this: 1. When you're using ellispes, write them with only three or four. And skip a space between them Ex: . . . or . . . . 2. When you use diolouge, you don't have to put any of the directions uppercase. Ex: Said, Shouted, Yelled, Cried, Mumbled, Demanded XXXXXXXXXX Ex: said, shouted, yelled, cries, mumbled, demanded OOOOOOOOOO 3. You know when you write something in the message box thingie? Try to make one paragraph explaining something, somewhere, or someone fill up the entire box so that you can tattoo the picture into the reader's brain. What I do: I'm the kind of person that acts really dumb, but I manage to pull off 92.50 averages in school even though I do so. You can call me . . . an idiot savant. Whenever I do something in school; let's say for example I get caught up in a fight over food, then I'll come up with an idea and make make a character that is in a food fight. Like the Grumble Eater, which has a Snorlax and a Grumpig that goes around town eating everything. Another example is when I saw a movie in school about the triangle fire. The idea that came out of there is when Harley hires a guy named Black Cinder that burns the building that May and Drew are in when they socialize with Jody and her friends; Gaby, Abby, and Sabdy in the mall that May dragged Drew to. May is scared to jump from five stories when Drew promises to catch her using a net that the firefighters have, and his Flygon got damaged when he escaped from the building. One more is when May and Drew meets a kid that is outcasted by some because he has psychic powers, but has an army of friends with him that is obsessed with an internet game. That kid is in my class and I hate him SO much ! ! ! (Cade Cade Dong- love to gossip). He forms a rivalry with Drew when Drew manages to beat him in one game. Yeah . . . you can find a lot of good ideas just by living your life. I also write them down so that I don't forget them. I HATE it when I have a good dream and I forget most of it . . . I just made these ideas from what happened in school yesterday when I was typing just now. Thanks for asking me that question! Came up with some good writing ideas! ;D
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 14, 2006 0:38:30 GMT -5
Well thanks for the ideas, but you'll have to use them for your fic. I have been running out of ideas a lot lately! But this chapter I'm working on now, I think you'll like, it reveals a lot of stuff. I'm not talking about chapter 8, the one after chapter 8. I already have chapter 8 posted at serebii and when I feel not so tired, I'll copy it here. Thanks for the suggestion too, I'll be watching for ideas now!
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Apr 14, 2006 7:20:36 GMT -5
What I would suggest is this: 2. When you use diolouge, you don't have to put any of the directions uppercase. Ex: Said, Shouted, Yelled, Cried, Mumbled, Demanded XXXXXXXXXX Ex: said, shouted, yelled, cries, mumbled, demanded OOOOOOOOOO You forgot to mention exclaimed, answered, queried/ questioned, mumbled, and others. These words describes emotion and punctuation. exclaimed= ! queried/ questioned= ? mumbled= . . .
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 23, 2006 19:58:08 GMT -5
Uh sorry, It's just sorta a habit to capitilize it
Chapter 8 Journey through the mountains!
After days of walking through the dead cold forest, May and Drew came to a stop just outside the last tree of the forest.
Before them was a steep path that led up to a large cave opening on the side of a large gray mountain.
"That mountain is huge!" Exclaimed May.
"Gee, ya think?" Said Drew sarcastically.
May eagerly ran towards the mountain path's starting point. A few yellow daises grew in the soft dirt along the path.
Drew eventully caught up with May, he did not like running. May's eyes sparkled at the sight of the tall mountain.
"Why are you so eager to get up there?" Asked Drew. He gently flipped through his hair, which sparkled in the afternoon sun.
"I want to get to the next contest like any other good coordinator!" Said May.
Drew sighed as May began to walk the steep path. Drew followed behind her. In a few spots on the mountain, there were flat ledges where a few Pokemon were playing.
Only a few pine trees grew near the path. In one of the pine trees, a familer purple Pokemon sat in a branch cackling as it watched Drew and May walked down the path.
The Pokemon had realized that Drew and May had gotten further down the path while it was laughing! "Saybleye!" Said Sabyleye as it hopped into a branch of the next pine tree.
May and Drew were almost to the cave. "Just in time! Looks like the sun's just about going down!" Said May.
They finally reached the flat area that lie just before the massive cave opening. Drew propped himself against a tree and eventually just sat down.
"What are you doing?!?!? We have a cave to explore!! We can't just sit here!!" Screamed May.
"Geez, I thought I'd take a rest, got a problem?" Said Drew, but just as he finished his sentence, May began to run closer towards the cave.
Drew groaned but slowly got up and followed her. As they walked in, a few lamps sparkled along the wall.
"Looks like some one has set this up for travalers!" Said May.
She kneeled down to a small wooden sign that read:
"Beware of Pokemon and....."
The rest of the last word appeared to be chipped off.
"Beware of Pokemon?" Said May nervously.
"It's proably just some stupid kid trying to scare people, get a grip" Said Drew slightly annoyed.
"Oh, uh ok...." But May was not convinced.
A little further through the cave and May said, "With all this light, we'll be in the next town in no time!"
May had spoken too soon. Sabyleye was clinging to the long chain of lamps and started chewing the wires. It chewed through and the lights all went out.
The Sabyleye laughed at the darkness. It stared right at May and Drew, it's jeweled eyes sparkled.
"Wha..What is that?!" Said May nervously pointing at the Sableye's shining eyes.
May grabbed Drew's arm quickly. Drew looked at her and his pale face turned a little red. He enjoyed May getting scared now, it was an excuse to touch May.
May closed her eyes as tight as she could as Drew looked around in the dark, hoping for the light to come back on, even though he knew it wouldn't.
May looked as if she was about to faint. "What's wrong with you May? I've never seen you like this!" Said Drew watching May.
"I...I....I don't....I don't like.....d-darkness" Said May stuttering.
Drew felt as though he could be a hero and bravley carried on through the darkness, May hanging on his shoulder in fear.
Sableye could see better in the dark, as it followed them through the cave. Drew had no idea where he was headed, but strangly, with May he felt brave.
"SABLEYE!!" Shreiked the Pokemon through the darkness.
May slowley and very quietly whimpered, "W...what was that?"
Drew cautiously looked around himself, but only saw darkness.
The Sableye was having a good time watching the two lost coordinators. It giggled with glee and shot a huge dark purple ball at Drew and May.
The Shadow Ball hit the ground at Drew and May's feet, the floor collapsed.
Drew and May fell down through the deep laberinth. Drew held on to May tightly, although he could see nothing.
Drew felt himself hit a rock solid ground hard.
"Geez, anyone here ever heard of a soft landing" Said Drew sarcastically.
"May? May, where are you!"
Drew waited for reply, but heard nothing but a few bits of rock crumble.
"MAY!!! WHERE ARE YOU?!?!" Called Drew desperartly, but again heard no reply.
He scrambled to his feet and began to feel his way through the dark.
Drew heard a steady breathing noise. He leaned down to the ground to see what the noise was.
He reached his hand out and felt something soft. "May!" He exclaimed.
He leaned down closer and saw her face a little. Her eyes were shut tight, but she was not dead. She had become unconsious during the fall.
"May...." Said Drew sadly. He helped pick her up.
"Grr, don't worry May, I'll get us out of here" Said Drew bravely.
He pulled May's limp body over his shoulders and trudged through the darkness of the cave.
"Light!" He exclaimed. It was true, although small, there was a peak of light.
Drew pulled himself closer to the light, which he found to be coming from a fire lit lamp.
It was still part of the cave, but it was lit up by the fire. Drew pulled May towards the lamp.
He examined her just to make himself feel better. May eyes were still tightly shut, her breathing still light.
"I...I...I miss her..." Said Drew shakely.
It was true, he stared at her blank face as if he expected her pretty blue eyes to be full of excitement like before.
"I shouldn't have picked on her"
"What? Is someone there?" Called a strange voice.
Drew leapt up and quickly looked around him. An experienced looking adult was making his way torwards Drew.
"What are you doing here?" Asked the man. He stared at Drew with his gray eyes, which strangly made Drew feel warm.
The man had matching hair color, and a purple and black outfit.
"Oh...yes we were trying to get to the next contest through this cave, and we got lost" Said Drew.
"Lost? Oh, well my name is Steven, former champion of the Hoenn League. What do you mean by we?" Asked Steven.
Drew turned sadly towards May. "Oh my! The poor girl, let me have a look!" Said Steven who expressed a worried look on his face.
He leaned down to May. "Unconsious, yes....I see..." Said Steven.
"How did this happen?"
Drew explained the cave in and how they just mysteriously fell through the floor.
"Odd, the floors here are too sturdy to just fall on their own, must have been a Pokemon!" Said Steven.
"So, what are you doing here?" Asked Drew.
"I heard of some rare rocks, it's a hobby of mine, so I've been studying this cave for months now! Not a trace of rare rock though" Said Steven.
"So, that means you know this cave pretty well, maybe you could help us get out?" Said Drew hopefully.
"Oh yes! Of course! Hold on, that girl..."
"May"
"Yes, that glittering, by her head....." Said Steven.
He ran over to May and pulled a glittering stone from underneath her.
"A Thunder Stone! How fortunate!" Exclaimed Steven as he examined the yellow rock.
"But yes, I have promised you a way out, we should go now" Said Steven quietly.
He shoved the stone in his pocket and said,"Come this way, bring May too!"
Drew hoisted May on his shoulders again and followed Steven a few yards away from the spot where he had found the stone.
Steven stopped at a short but steep wall. "If you can climb this, the exit is just at the top!" Said Steven.
"I dunno, I've never really been a good climber, and with May....." Said Drew.
"Hmm, yes that's a problem al right..." Said Steven. "All I've got are steel types!"
Drew thought hard and then exclaimed, "May's Venusaur!"
"Excellent thinking, its Vine Whip can easily get you out of here!" Said Steven, a kind look was set in his deep gray eyes.
Drew dug through May's yellow pack around her waist. He finally pulled out a poke ball and through it at the ground.
May's green plant Pokemon appeared. "Venusaur!" It roared. It saw May quickly and ran over to her.
"Don't worry, she'll be ok, but we need your help" Said Drew.
The plant Pokemon stared at Drew for a moment, not sure if he could be trusted. Then it looked back at its trainer and nodded bravely to Drew.
"Can you use your Vine Whip to get May and I to the top of that cliff?" Said Drew gently.
Venusaur agreed and grabbed Drew around the waist with a thick vine, and put him atop the cliff.
Next, it put May next to Drew. Still unconsious, May fell over, but Drew caught her and held her up. He returned Venusaur to its poke ball.
"Thank you Steven!" Called out Drew.
Steven smiled and waved. "Good luck in your next contest!"
Drew grinned and his emerald eyes sparkled in the sunshine coming through the cave's exit.
May's sapphire blue eyes fluttered open. She was still pale, but managed to stand up straight.
"Drew!" She exclaimed.
Drew chuckled and said, "Have a nice nap?"
May smiled back as the two young coordinators walked out of the cave into the nice morning sun.
They had only just gotten outside the cave when a beautiful city full of skyscrapers shined before them.
May had spotted the contest hall through all the tall buildings.
"Come on Drew, that contest is waiting for us, and I'm not gonna miss it!" Exclaimed May as she took off down the trail to the city.
Drew smiled, a bigger smile than ever before, and ran after May.
This next contest meant another ribbon, one step closer to the Hoenn Grand Festival!
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 23, 2006 19:58:57 GMT -5
Chapter 9 Harley's Revenge! Double Rescue Misson!! "Ugh, May come on! We're gonna miss registration for the next contest!" shouted Drew. May was slowly following him. They were on a pretty trail not far from the mountain's exit. The trees shimmered in the sunlight and various Pokemon curiously watched the two pass through the forest. "But I'm tired," whined May. "Too tired for the contest May?" asked Drew. Those words perked May up a little bit. She finally sped up to Drew's side and a tad bit faster. "When is the contest registration over?" Said May curiously. "It's over in an hour, you should know that already." Said Drew irritably. May blushed, embarrased but then resumed to one of her favorite activities. "Reporter May on the scene!" said May holding her fingers in a camera like position. "We're on our way to the next Pokemon Contest where exciting adventures await us! But for now, we appear to be lost in a forest with only the guide of Drew!" "Give it a rest May, besides, we're not lost you know," said Drew impatiently. "Well at least I'm trying to keep myself entertained! Better than you staring at the ground all the time" May angrily stated. Drew seemed flushed for a moment, but realized May was right. Looking down seemed like an odd habit to him. He had done it ever since he got Roselia and was alone. Now that he was with May, he felt like he wanted to look at her, but his habts forced him to look down. He truely wanted to see May's shining grin every morning, her happy-go-lucky nature, but he also felt like it wouldn't be cool to act like he was interested in a girl. "Uh, Drew? Are you ok?" Drew blinked and realized he had stopped suddenly just to think about May. "Oh . . . . er sorry about that, just thinking about something . . . " "Ya know, I was thinking about something too," May sighed. "Do you . . . . Do you ever think that one day we might be . . . more than just friends?" Drew stopped again and looked up at May speechless. Somehow, Drew was very good at staying calm and keeping his cool in these situations, so he simply shrugged and said, "I dunno . . . . maybe someday if we always stick together . . . " By Drew's reaction, May suddenly realized the seriousness of her question and blushed. "Drew . . . . I can tell you have something on your mind. You think about it when you stare at the ground. What is it?" "I'm not thinking about anything that serious." "I don't care if it sounds stupid to you, just say it, I might be able to help you!" Drew sighed. He didn't want to have to tell May what he had always been thinking about, but he felt he had to do it sometime, and May requested now. "Ok . . . . well . . . . you know how you always get mad at me for not talking . . ." muttered Drew. "Yeah?" Drew looked as though he really didn't want to say what he was about to. "Well ya see, I've never had a real friend like you before May, I don't know what it's like. I'm an only child, I have had no one my whole life until I met you! I want to talk to you! I want to see you! I can't . . . " Shouted Drew. "Drew . . . . " May gently swayed her voice. "Does . . . . Does that mean you had no parents there?" "Yes, my parents loved and cared for me a lot and supported everything I did, but I had no other kids my age around. You remember what it was like being little and just wantng someone your age around who really understands you!" Drew sadly explained to May. "Yes . . . . yes I suppose . . . " said May quietly. "What's wrong wth you now?" asked Drew. May sadly shook her head. "I don't know what happened to my parents, or my little brother Max . . . " "Max?" Drew curiously wondered. "Yeah . . . . " "How come? Or would you rather not talk about it here?" "It's ok . . . . if you really do want to know . . . . " May explained to him everything she remembered. * * * * * * * "Now kids be careful in the water, May watch your brother please," warned a middle aged woman. A younger, 8 year old May, was splashing water at her brother on the shores of a large sandy lake. May was in a blue bikini, her mom was in a pink one, and her brother had on green swim trunks. "Oh mom, we're ok! We don't plan to go in the water!" replied May. "Yeah!" exclaimed her little brother. "See, Max agrees! You can trust us mommy!" explained May happily. "I know, but as a mom I just have to worry sometimes . . . . " "Come on Max! Sand Castles!" exclaimed May as she pointed to a sandy spot of beach a few feet away. "But I like the game we're playing now!" whined Max. "But we've played it for so long now, why can't we just build a sand castle?" argued May. "Sand Castles are stupid, " muttered Max. May sighed. "Fine, have it your way," May splashed a giant wave right into Max's face. "That wasn't funny! You'll pay!" shouted Max, but deep down May knew Max enjoyed it as he flung a clump of sand into May's mouth. She immeaditly spit out what she could. Max giggled happily as May tried everything to get all the sand out of her mouth. Then Max looked towards the horizen line on the water and saw the setting sun turn into the seven colors of the rainbow. "Mommy! Mommy look! The sun!" squealed Max. May and Max's mom looked at the sun. "That's odd. The sky does weird stuff sometimes," their mom sleepily said as she lie back down on a lawn chair and closed her eyes. "Ok . . . . " said Max, still not convinced. Suddenly, a large beach ball hit Max and flung him into deep water. May looked over and saw some careless people hitting the beach ball back and forth. "May! Mommy! Help!" screamed Max flailing his arms around madly in the water. May couldn't believe her mom hadn't heard him. May sighed and dove into the water and swam over to her thrashing little brother. "Max, calm down I've got you," alerted May patiently. May pulled her brother into shallow waters when the rainbow sun suddenly blinded them. It appeared the sun was moving towards them, but as it approached May saw that it was a Ho-oh. Its firce eyes glowed red and it's beautiful orange feathers glowed in seven colors. It took one of its large talons and tried to grab Max, but May pushed him out of the way and got caught in Ho-oh's massive talon instead. "May!" screamed Max. Ho-oh slowley rose higher and higher and it took May out of Max's reach and flew away. May fainted in fear. She only remembered waking up somewhere really strange. People around her said she was in Littleroot Town of the Hoenn Region. * * * * * * Drew quietly stared at May. "Oh . . . . um . . . . I'm sorry . . . " "But it's all in the past now! I try not to think about what happened a lot," stated May. Drew went back to staring at the ground. He didn't really want to admit it, but he did feel a little sorry for May. Drew had always remembered having his parents around to cheer for him when he first started contests. He knew that they had to stay home, but watched him in every contest with pride. Before Drew had met May, he had always thought og it as his inspiration to keep trying and get better with every contest. May sighed, she was a little tired of Drew never talking. If he had such nice parents, why is he so quiet? Even if he didn't have any brothers or sisters . . . "Hello little Drew, we meet again!" said a familar voice from a nearby tree. "Who was that?" wondered May. A man dressed like a Cacturne jumped down from a shadowy tree. "Heh, thought you'd reconize me, it hasn't been that long!" Said the man. "Harley!" shouted May. "Yup, that's my name, and don't wear it out!" Harley said with a smirk. "What do you think you're doing interupting us on the way to our next contest?" demanded Drew. "Oh, you should know Drew! I of course, was eavesdropping on your little conversation! A little unexpected though . . . . " said Harley. "Shut up with those lame excuses, what's the real reason you're here?!" shouted Drew. "Glad you asked, see, that little Rose thing of yours, it's pretty cool, perfect for someone like myself, the thorns are amazing . . . . " said Harley, but was interrupted by Drew. "Get to the point!" "Ok, Ok, no need to get all worked up now!" said Harley in a falsey sweet voice. "Anyhow, I'm here to steal that little Roselia! So hand it over like a good boy!" "Drew would never give up Roselia! Especially to a creep like you!" shouted May. "Oh is that so? I guess we'll just have to do this the hard way then, let's have a little battle, your Roselia VS. my Ariados," challenged Harley. "Drew! Don't do it!" cried May. "If he doesn't, I'll just get Roselia anyways," Said Harley with a wide grin. "I guess I have to . . . Go Roselia!" Said Drew as he threw out his red and white poke ball. Out of the ball came Roselia. It smiled at Drew. "Ok Roselia, battle your best today, this creep really wants you and I don't plan to lose you" Said Drew. "Rose!" chirped the Pokemon and stared fiercley at Harley. Harley grabbed a black and purple poke ball and threw it at the ground. It opened to reveal a creepy, colorful spider Pokemon. May watched the spider nervously, then looked into Harley's cold purple eyes. It suddenly hit her what Harley was planning to do. "String Shot!" commanded Harley. Aridos shot out a thick, sticky white string that was aimed right for Roselia. It was going very fast and that's when Drew caught on to Harley's plan too. "You dirty cheater! I should have known! You're just going to capture my Roselia with String Shot without any battle at all!" Shouted Drew. "Oh, too bad for you!" smirked Harley with another face of delight. Drew attempted to have Roselia dodge, but the string was too fast! All of a sudden, May jumped in front of Roselia and prevented the attack from hitting Roselia. May got hit instead and the sticky thread had her stuck in place. "Ooooo! This works nice too! Ariados, reel her in!" ordered Harley. Aridos grabbed the string with its skinny legs and pulled the trapped May right to Harley. Harley pulled May from the string and then grabbed her around the waist and held her there. "Let her go!" demanded Drew. "Oh no! That wouldn't be any fun at all!" giggled Harley, holding the struggling May without much force. "But I still don't plan to leave without getting what I came for! Aridos, make this String Shot the fastest you've ever done!" Aridos once again shot a sticky thread at Roselia, but this time, the string was going really fast! Aridos managed to catch Roselia like May, and pull it to Harley. "No!! Not Roselia too!" cried Drew. "Heh heh, this turned out so much better than planned! Sorry Drew, I have places to be!" smirked Harley as he jumped back into the tree with May and Roselia. "Drew!! Help!" cried May at the last second. Drew ran to the base of the thick tree, but by the time he got there, Harley was out of sight. "D*** him. He won't get away with this . . . . " "Rrr, go Flygon!" growled Drew throwing another poke ball out. This time, Drew's fierce green and red dragon, Flygon, came out. "Fly!" the mystic Pokémon cried. "Ok Flygon, we need to find May and Roselia, let's go!" ordered Drew as he climbed onto Flygon's back. The large dragon beat its massive wings a few times before lifting off the ground. Drew scanned the trees below him, no sign of movement except for a few wild Pokemon. Drew forgot all about contest registration, but it wouldn't be important anyways. Not with May and Roselia missing . . . * * * * * * Meanwhile, Harley had taken May and Roselia to a small, one-roomed cabin in the middle of the dense forest. "Oh Roselia, your trainer is so thick! The only reason I really want you is to get my revenge! That Tailow may have gotten away, but you will not!" Said Harley. "Oh yeah, Aridos, please make sure our guests stay for awhile . . . " Ariados shot the sticky string once again. After a few minutes, Ariados stopped shooting the string and looked happily up at Harley. May had her hands and feet tied together with String Shot, while Roselia had its roses tied together. "Good work Ariados!" praised Harley. "Drew will sure be missing you two, ha ha!" With that, Harley returned Aridos to its poke ball and walked out of the house, leaving May and Roselia alone and defenseless. "Ha, that ought to teach Drew not to mess with me!" growled Harley, very satisfied with himself. He jumped back into another tree to try and find Drew to taunt him more. * * * * * * Drew gave up on the aerial search and tried a ground search with Masquerain instead. Suddenly, a small green Pokemon landed on Drew's shoulder. "Ahhh!" screamed Drew. The Pokemon flew off his shoulder and landed neatly on the ground. Drew recovered from the surprise and looked at the little Pokemon. "Treecko!" It said in a soft, high voice. The Pokemon had a large green tail, red belly, and bright yellow eyes. "Oh . . . . it's only a Treecko . . . " Said Drew. "Ko! Tree! Ko!" exclaimed the Pokemon, pointing its finger at something. "I'm sorry Treecko, but I'm looking for a friend, I'll play with you some other time." Treecko looked as if it were about to explode. "Tree! Tree!" "Do you know something about where my friend is?" asked Drew in amazement. Treecko nodded and jumped back onto Drew's shoulder. It pointed towards a small path. "Wow, you sure aren't afraid of humans, well, if you're willing to help, I'll take it!" Drew ran in the direction that Treecko pointed. After a few minutes, Drew and Treecko heard a rustle in a tree, and Harley jumped down. "Ha! I was looking for you!" exclaimed Harley. "Let go of May and Roselia!" shouted Drew. "Too bad I no longer have them! Go find them or else!" ordered Harley fakeishly and gleefully, then ran off. "Ko . . . . " muttered Treecko, but was soon pointing Drew to May and Roselia's location once more. Finally, with Treecko's help, Drew found the small cabin. "I'll bet you anything that's where Harley put them!" said Drew angerliy. Treecko nodded and jumped off Drew's shoulder and ran towards the door. Drew caught up with just as it was using a powerful Pound attack to break down the door. Drew silently slipped inside. He flipped on a light switch by the door, and the lights turned on. In one corner of the room, Drew caught sight of May and Roselia all tied up. "Ah! May! Roselia!" cried Drew happily. When he reached them though, both appeared to be in great pain, but weren't moving at all. "Uh . . . . May? What's wrong with you two?" Treecko ran over to Drew's side and carefully examined the two still bodies. Treecko nodded and sent out a puff of orange, sparkely powder. "Oh I get it! But no! Not a Stun Spore attack!" cried Drew. "What can I do to save them?" Treecko paced back and forth a few times but then suddenly bolted out of the cabin. "Oh great, that's a real help," said Drew sarcastically. He had Flygon Flamethrower through May and Roselia's binds, but still couldn't figure out how to help them recover from Stun Spore. Treecko came back about an hour later with an odd leaf. It was shiney and blue! "What is that Treecko?" asked Drew curiously. Treecko didn't say a word, but instead cut the leaf in two. It walked over to May and Roselia with a smile on its face. First it put one side of the leaf over Roselia's mouth. Roselia woke up slowley, but when it saw Drew, it jumped into his arms. "Roselia! You're ok!" exclaimed Drew as he hugged his Pokemon. After a minute, he set Roselia down and anxiously prepared to watch Treecko awaken May. Treecko repeated the process and put a half of the shimmering blue leaf over May's mouth. This time, it didn't work. May was still frozen and in major pain. "What! No way! It didn't work!" Cried Drew. Treecko looked surprised too. "Uh . . . . anymore ideas, Treecko?" Treecko sadly shook its head. "Well there's got to be some kind of cure, I'll take her to the Pokemon Center, they'll know what to do! Hey Treecko, do ya think you could navigate me again? You can use my Poke'Nav if you know how." Treecko nodded and Drew handed it his Poke'Nav. Treecko stared an awe at the little yellow machine. Drew returned Roselia to its poke ball and hosted May on his shoulders. "Poor May . . . . " With Treecko's navigational help, Drew managed to safely get out of the woods and reach the Pokemon Center, but it was sun down. "I'm glad you brought her here when you did, any longer and I'm afraid . . . . " Said Nurse Joy. "You can heal her right?" asked Drew anxiously. "Of course!" said Nurse Joy as she sprayed a little bit of medicene on May's body. "There! A good night's sleep and she'll be all better!" Drew sighed with relief. "That's good" Then he suddenly remembered the Pokemon Contest. "On no! We can't enter the contest now!" Treecko tugged on Drew's purple jacket. "Oh yeah, thanks Treecko, I almost forgot that some things are just more imporant than battling! Hey Treecko, you should go back to the forest before it gets too dark ok?" Treecko sighed sadly. "I think that Treecko wants to go with you!" Said Joy with a cheerful smile. "Is that so Treecko? Do you want to come with me?" Asked Drew. The Treecko smiled and jumped into his arms. Drew couldn't help but smile too at his new contest partner. Things were actually going to work out afterall! May, still unconsious, had to be helped to bed by Drew, who looked forward to seeing her bright, cheerful smile the next morning! __________________
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Post by Harley Scarow on Apr 23, 2006 20:01:30 GMT -5
Yay Steven comes! Yay! My favorite Pokémon Character is here, Harley! You want me to revise for mistakes?
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 24, 2006 14:49:59 GMT -5
Do what you have to do wobbuffetDS
Chapter 11 Treecko's training! A new sun, a new day!
The early morning sun rose high into the sky as the hours went by. Drew, was of course, up early. Even though Nurse Joy had said May would be fine, he couldn't help but worry a little. By now it was 8:00 and most of the trainers and Pokemon were all still asleep.
Drew and May were staying in an average Pokemon Center room. Two oak bunk-beds, a window, and a nightstand. Where there wasn't beds, the room had enough space for trainers to walk around a little bit. Trainers weren't expected to do anything but sleep in the rooms anyways.
Drew had lie in bed staring at May's stiff body for what felt like hours. He had finally decided to get his mind off of it by doing a little training with his new Treecko! He had gone outside the Pokemon Center in an open field not far away. He had taken May's Poke'Dex as well to learn a little bit more about Treecko.
The field that Drew was in was clear of any other trainers and Pokemon. Drew guessed that they were all still sleeping like the people and Pokemon in the Center.
"Ok Treecko, let's go!" Called Drew throwing out a poke ball that released Treecko. "Hello Treecko, or I should say good morning!"
"Tree!" Exclaimed Treecko happily as if to be saying hi back.
"I'd like to see a little bit of your skills so I know what to do with you in a contest!" Said Drew gently. "I already know you have advanced navigation skills, and can even read a Poke'Nav, but I'd like to know some attacks that you can do."
Drew pulled out May's Poke'Dex and pressed a green button. Immeaditily, a mechanical female voice told Drew all about Treecko. "Treecko. The Wood Gecko Pokemon. Treecko has small hooks that enable it to scale verticle walls. Treecko attacks by slamming foes with its thick tail"
"Well I guess I know who to call on when I need to climb a tree! Let's see what attacks you can learn!" Said Drew happily. "Ok, so do you know Pound attack?"
Treecko nodded and walked over to a nearby rock. With a powerful jump, Treecko did a cool twist and hit the rock hard with its tail. The rock crumbled to pieces.
"Wow! That's pretty good! Do you know Bullet Seed?" Asked an impressed Drew.
Treecko nodded again and shot glowing yellow bullets from its mouth.
"A strong Bullet Seed too, I guess you're pretty strong already!" Said Drew. "So, how about a practice battle to warm up!"
"Tree!" Said Treecko, accepting the battle.
"Alright then, go Masquerain!" Called out Drew throwing another poke ball that released Masquerain.
"Ok Masquerain, do your best against Treecko!" Said Drew to his Pokemon.
Treecko and Masquerain faced each other. Drew stood behind Treecko. "Alright Treecko, start by using Bullet Seed!" Commanded Drew.
Treecko happily obeyed and shot the glowing yellow bullets from its mouth. All of a sudden, the attack was shot down by an Overheat attack!
"Who stopped by battle?" Said Drew.
Suddenly a happy looking Blaziken appeared a few feet away from Drew.
"Oh! Blaziken!" Exclaimed Drew. He reconized it as May's Blaziken immeaditly from its nature towards Drew. May's Blaziken had always been playful and kind around Drew and his Pokemon.
"You look so happy, and you're out of you poke ball, that means May is awake?" Asked Drew anxiously.
Blaziken nodded. Drew smiled and Treecko climbed to his shoulder as Blaziken led the way back to the Pokemon Center.
Joy stopped him when he first entered though. "Quiet! Just because she's awake doesn't mean you can't wake other trainers!" Scolded Joy.
"Sorry, I'll be more quiet" Said Drew. He wasn't really paying attention to what Nurse Joy had said and ran down the hall to his room as soon as Joy let go of him. He was about to burst open the door, but figured May probably wouldn't like it much.
He slowly opened the door and walked up to May's bedside. "Blaziken! I thought you told me she was awake!" Whispered Drew.
"I am" Said May sleepily as she opened her eyes. "I was simply taking another small nap while Blaziken was out" May fully pulled the blankets off of herself. Still dressed from the day before. As she tried to get out of bed, she fell back down.
"May! What's wrong?" Said Drew.
"Oh...well I guess I'm still not fully recovered yet" Said May.
"Stay in bed and rest then. Stun Spore is a harsh attack, anyone would have to rest for awhile to fully recover from it! My Roselia still isn't fully recovered yet etheir!" Said Drew.
Then May noticed the Treecko on his shoulder. "Hey Drew, who's Treecko is that?"
"Oh, this is my Treecko, it helped me get you here and it liked me a lot so I caught it! I think Treecko will be great in contests!" Said Drew proudly.
"Speaking of contests, you missed it didn't you?" Said May sadly.
"Oh, yeah......but don't worry about that now! You just concentrate on getting strong again!" Said Drew.
"Yeah, I won't be getting out of bed today it looks like. Hey Drew, will you take my Pokemon out to get some exercise?" Asked May.
"Uh....sure! Not a problem, they could use some more strength" Said Drew.
"Hey! My Pokemon are plenty strong! The only way their gonna stay that way is by getting out of their poke balls often.
"Yeah sure, now give me your poke balls, I'm going back out to that field." Said Drew.
May pulled her yellow waist bag off and pulled out 5 poke balls and gave them to Drew. "Blaziken is already out, so that's one less Pokemon you have to worry about!" Said May with a little smile.
"Ok, well, get some rest May, I'm gonna go train" Said Drew flipping his finger through a strand of his shining emerald colored hair. "Oh yeah, got something for you" Drew flipped a very pretty rose into May's lap and walked back out of the room.
May stared at the rose for a moment then smiled and just imagined what it could mean. She put it on the night stand next the her bed and sunk back into a deep sleep.
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Meanwhile, Drew, Treecko, Blaziken, and Masquerain all headed back down to the field. When they reached it, Drew threw out all 5 of May's other poke balls.
Out of the first one came Venusaur, who roared happily to be out in the sunshine. Second was Delcatty, who simply meowed and fell asleep. Third was Blastoise, who shot out a colorful jet of water at the sun. Next was Beautifly, who's wings sparkled and shone brightly. Last to come out was Snorlax, who as you can guess, was asleep.
"Well, since May's Pokemon are all out, go Flygon!" Said Drew throwing out one of his poke balls. Flygon came out beating its wings and cheering. "Now May and I have all our Pokemon out, come on Treecko, ket's have some fun!" Exclaimed Drew.
Drew led all the Pokemon to a carnival that was near by. Blaziken, Blastoise, Venusaur, and Flygon all went for the Haunted Ghost Pokemon House, while Delcatty, Beautifly, and Masquerain went to an obstacle course. That left Snorlax who just decided to sleep through everything. Treecko stayed by Drew the whole time.
Drew watched the Pokemon all go on the fun rides in the park. Drew was worried Treecko might get jealous, but Treecko seemed to be happy staying next to Drew.
"Tree" Said Treecko twitching its nose.
"What's wrong Treecko?" Asked Drew.
"Ko!" Said Treecko as it sneezed hard. Its hand glowed for a moment and it crushed a giant hole in the gound
"Wow, that was cool!" Said Drew taking out the Poke'Dex.
"Crush Claw. The user tears at the foe with sharp claws to reduce HP" Said the Poke'Dex.
"Wow, you learned Crush Claw just like that! Incredible!" Said an amazed Drew.
Treecko smiled happily. Then it heard a voice and sharply turned its head to see. "Hey! That was a pretty good Crush Claw attack!" Said the voice.
A kid, not too younger than Drew, ran up to Treecko. He had jet black hair, large glasses, and a warm smile. His shirt was green, his pants brown, and he carried a small yellow backpack on his back.
"Uh thanks?" Said Drew uncomfortably to the kid.
"Oh! So you're this Treecko's trainer? Hi, I'm Max!" Exclaimed Max.
"Nice to meet you Max, I'm Drew! And this is my Treecko" Said Drew.
"How'd you like to battle? I have a pretty good team of Pokemon, but I wanna face that awsome Treecko!" Exclaimed Max.
"I'll take a challenge anytime, Treecko and I were just about to do some practicing!" Said Drew. "You up for a battle Treecko?"
"Let's go to a more clear space, I want to have room to attack!" Said Max.
The two boys went back to the empty field, Treecko sticking close to Drew's side. "Ok Treecko, I choose you!" Said Drew to Treecko.
Treecko nodded and faced Max in a battle ready position.
"Ok then, go Kirlia!" Commanded Max throwing a poke ball out. Out of the ball came a graceful Pokemon. It focused its deep red eyes on Treecko and struck a pose.
"Treecko, use Bullet Seed!" Commanded Drew. Treecko obeyed and shot the yellow bullets from its mouth. Kirlia glowed with a blue light and suddenly made the bullets disappear!
"What happened Treecko?" Said Drew nervously.
"Kirlia stopped your attack with Psychic!" Said Max happily. "Now Kirlia, use Psywave! Use speed to your advantage!"
Kirlia's eyes glowed blue and shot massive blue waves at Treecko swiftly. The attack hit Treecko straight on, and Treecko hit the ground with a thud and fainted.
"Treecko? Can you keep battling?" Said Drew.
Treecko didn't speak. The match was over and Max had won it.
"Great battle! That was an impressive Bullet Seed! I wouldn't expect you to beat me though, that Kirlia evolved from my Ralts, which was my first Pokemon! We've been training hard for years!" Said Max helping Treecko up.
"So Max, are you a Pokemon Coordinator?" Asked Drew.
"Oh....no. That's not what I do at all. I'm not really a trainer or a coordinator! I sorta research Pokemon and train them, while looking for someone" Said Max.
"Looking for someone?" Repeated Drew.
"Yeah, my big sis, disappeared when I was really young, so I set out to find her again" Said Max. "So I take it you're a coordinator then?"
"Yup! I'm traveling with a friend right now, and we participate in contests together!" Exclaimed Drew.
"So how many ribbons do you have already?" Asked Max curiously.
Drew pulled out his case and shoved it in Max's face. "3 already here in Hoenn!"
"Three already? I don't know any coordinators with that many, I've never met one with more than one ever before!" Exclaimed Max.
"Oh, well my friend has two I think" Said Drew.
"Two! Your friend must be really good too! If your friend travels with you though, where are they?" Said Max.
Drew sighed. "Well, ya see. This guy attacked us yesterday and she got Stun Spored pretty badly. She's already awoken once, but she's still not strong enough to travel again, she can hardly get out of bed! So I lefther to rest back at the Pokemon Center so I could train Treecko a little bit. Her Pokemon are with me though"
"Oh, that's so sad! Can I see her Pokemon though? I bet they're cool!" Exclaimed Max.
"Uh, sure! They're all enjoying the carnival though" Said Drew.
"There's no point and ruining their fun then! In that case, can you tell me their names?" Said Max.
"Ok, let's see.....Blaziken, Blastoise, Snorlax, Delcatty, Venusaur, and........Beautifly!" Said Drew trying hard to remember all six of May's Pokemon.
"Wow! Those sound like some awsome Pokemon! What's your friend's name by the way?" Said an amazed Max.
"May! You know what's funny, she said she got seperated from her brother named Max when she was younger as well" Said Drew with a chuckle.
"No way! My sister's name was May!" Exclaimed Max. "I'll bet its really her! I've been searching all my Pokemon journey to find my sister! Can I please go see if it's really her?" Said Max excitidly.
"Well sure, I see no problem, but be quiet, I think she might still be recovering" Said Drew.
Drew returned Treecko to its poke ball and led Max back to the Pokemon Center, and once inside, to Drew and May's room.
Max and Drew slowly crept inside. Drew went to May's bedside and slowly woke her up. "Huh, what is it Drew?" Said May sleepily.
"You have a visitor, check it out" Said Drew quietly pointing to Max. "This is Max!"
May stared at Max for a moment and then said, "Max.....is that really you? My little brother?"
"May! It really is you! Remember! We got seperated when we were younger and I came to find you!" Said Max happily.
"I do remember....I missed you so much! I'm sorry you have to see me this way" Said May sadly.
"Drew told me what happened, are you going to be ok?" Said Max with a worried tone.
"I'm sorta weak now, but I'll get stronger and I'm sure I'll be ok!" Said May confidently.
"May......who ever that crook is! I'll find him and give him what he deserves!" Said Max angerliy.
"It's ok Max, Officer Jenny is already on the search and besides, maybe I want to be with my little brother a little longer" Said May.
Max giggled and smiled. May smiled too. Drew enjoyed the moment as well, in his own way of course. He was glad to see May happy when she was still hurt from the day before.
"I'm going to go out with Treecko for a little while longer, May here are your poke balls, I think your Pokemon enjoyed themselves" Said Drew gently putting May's poke balls on the night stand next to her bed.
"Thanks Drew! Hey Max, you were always facinated by Treecko when you were younger, so why don't you go out with Drew too?" Suggested May.
"Are you sure? I do want to go, but I don't want to leave you alone" Said Max.
"Oh Max! I'm older remember! I can take care of myself now! Now go enjoy your time with Drew and Treecko ok?" Said Max strongly.
"Alright then, if you say so!" Said Max happily.
"Come on Max, back to the field, and May, just rest....."Said Drew.
He and Max walked back down to the field, Treecko clinging to Drew's shoulder.
Max pulled out a poke ball. "Sceptile go!"
Out of Max's ball came a tall green Pokemon with calm yellow eyes. It smiled and called, "Scept!"
"A Sceptile! It looks pretty strong too! My Treecko will be like that too someday!" Exclaimed Drew patting the large Pokemon.
"Tree...."Said Treecko nervously.
"It's ok Treecko! My Sceptile is very friendly, I think you two could get along well together!" Said Max.
Treecko nodded at Max and ran over to Sceptile. The two Pokemon appeared to be training and playing on and off.
Drew and Max talked until nightfall and watched the Pokemon. Max told Drew of all the places he had travled and trainers he had met. Drew told Max about his and May's travels and how awsome Pokemon Contests were.
When the crescent moon was visible in the clear night sky, Drew told Max that it was getting late and that he was going to go back to the Pokemon Center. Max had agreed to meet them at the next contest.
Drew wearily made his way back to he Pokemon Center. He slowly crept into May and his room so he too could rest. He noticed May sleeping quietly and she had a cute smile on her face.
Drew leaned down and placed a gentle kiss on her cheek.
"Once you're all better, I will be too" Said Drew as he removed his purple jacket and threw it on the ground as he fell into May's bed sleepily. He almost immeaditly fell asleep. ------------------------------- "Ahh! What are you doing in my bed!?!" Shrieked May, smacking Drew hard in the back of the head.
Drew groaned and sat up. "I see you're feeling all better now"
"I know! But that still doesn't answer my question!" Snapped May.
"Hey, take it easy, I just wasn't thinking straight last night" Said Drew, although it seemed as if May knew the truth.
May gave Drew another sharp blow to the head before she felt satisfied with herself. Drew rubbed the spot where she had it him and rolled out of the bed. He picked up his jacket off the floor and slipped it back on over his black sweater.
"Ok, enough drama already! It's bad enough we missed the contest" Said Drew as though he was trying to bring up new topics.
"We missed it?! Makes me hate Harley even more" Said May bitterly.
"I wouldn't exactly say you were quite ready though. I haven't seen you train once" Said Drew.
May opened her mouth to speak, but said nothing. She knew Drew was right, but from now on, it wasn't going to be that way! May was going to train the moment she got outside! That would show Drew! _____________________
The two set off again in search of their next contest and their next adventure!
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Apr 24, 2006 18:04:49 GMT -5
That is so cool. You made a chapter that I've never seen before on other forums here. I think that it's like a family here now so you get the idea of what I'm saying. But by the way, do you still want me to edit and revise your stories for you so that you can put them up on others, having people only love the wonderfulness of this fanfiction and not having to throw in constructive critisism of the grammar errors?
Did you know that Encyclopika used to make errors just like me and you? Chapter 11 . . . sometimes I wonder who's fan-fiction is longer and better . . . me or you . . .
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 24, 2006 18:14:00 GMT -5
Wow, thanks! That's one of the nicest comments so far! Well, I did wonder how Ama's stories were so perfect, I mean, nobody is perfect. Most of my mistakes result from my super fast typing! I'm sure your story is just as good, if not better than mine. This is my first story, I'm new to this, so I wasn't sure what to do, how to devolpe characters, how to keep their personalitles. I'm sure you have much better experience with that.
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Apr 24, 2006 18:26:41 GMT -5
It's kind of cool the way that Drew gets a Treecko in the end. Makes you wonder how some things can happen when you at least expect them. Nurse Joy was able to "heal" May? That's kind of cool. Never heard of a Pokémon Doctor being able to do that. Harley is so evil and well . . . *censored word* I really don't know why wobbuffetds likes him so much. But he was really cool in this episode!
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 24, 2006 18:33:16 GMT -5
Well, I don't think Harley is terrible in the show, he's quite funny actually, I could see why one would like him, but I like to give characters my own little twist, and for Harley, well it's being a bad guy! I don't like hospitals being in my story so I just say Joy is trained to heal humans too. I've got my idea for the next chapter, I can't wait to start writing about it! Harley won't be back for a while, I felt he was getting boring to fast. He'll return again though, he's great for getting the bad guy spot ^^
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Post by skittles72492 on Apr 24, 2006 23:38:31 GMT -5
HarleyScarow . . . wobbuffetds . . . whatever. He called me and woke me up during the middle of the night for this?! *mumble mumble* And I have to say that it was all worthwhile, because this story that you wrote here is so good that I have to say, is almost as good as WobbuffetDS'. Which one do you think is longer and better, yours or his? I don't know what to say but all I know is that you're on the right track so keep it going, okay?
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 25, 2006 15:46:01 GMT -5
Middle of the night? I'm sorry, well I'm glad you found a little joy out of it ^^;
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Post by Torchic23 on Apr 29, 2006 19:09:15 GMT -5
Chapter 11 Whiscash in the dark forest! Finding the light in darkness! Drew and May had stopped for a break by a large but beautiful crystal clear lake. Drew had no intrest in the lake, but had let Treecko out of its pokeball to enjoy the nice day. May however, couldn't keep herself away from the lake. "Ah! Monster!" screamed May suddenly. Treecko jumped to Drew's shoulder as he ran to May's side. "May! For crying out loud! It's a Whiscash! Not a monster! Just a fish Pokemon! It can't do anything but flop around!" Said Drew, a little annoyed. Just then, the fish shot a thick stream of dirty mud in Drew's face, Treecko jumped off Drew's shoulder just in time to dodge. What he said looked to be pretty true. The "monster" that May had seen was just a Whiscash dropping in for a visit. It was about the size of a meduim sized dog. It was a shiney blue with sleek yellow whiskers coming from the sides of it's mouth. It had a big stupid looking smile. May giggled. "Ok, so it shot out a little mud puddle, it's still weak!" Said Drew. Once again the Whiscash opened its mouth and this time, shot Drew in the face with water. "Guess you got your daily bath!" giggled May. "WILL YOU CUT THAT OUT!" ordered Drew. The Whiscash however, did not stop enjoying itself. It rammed Drew hard in the stomech and he fell back into the water. "Hey Drew! Stop playing around!" urged May in a sing-song voice. Drew's head came back up above the water, his emerald hair drenched and hanging over his eyes, and his clothes were soaking too. Even Treecko couldn't help but laugh a little. "Great, this is perfect...."Said Drew sarcastically. * * * After the little ordeal with the Whiscash, Drew and May were forced to take an even longer break. Drew had to get his clothes dry. He took off his purple jacket and hung it over a tree branch as well as his pants. This left Drew in his boxers and black sweat shirt. "What are you laughing at?" asked Drew looking over at May who was now giggling uncontrollably and pointing at Drew's boxers. "You are so perverted . . . " muttered Drew as he sat down on the grass and sighed. The Whiscash still flopped along the shore of the lake. May ran over to play with the fish. "Aw, it's so cute Drew! Look at that little smile!" "If it's so cute, then why don't you catch it?" asked Drew bitterly. "Yeah! Great idea! I'll catch it! This will be great for Pokemon Contests!" exclaimed May, already pulling Blastoise's pokeball out of her pack. "Ok Blastoise! Let's catch Whiscash!" May threw her ball in front of the Whiscash. Blastoise looked fierce today. It's brown shell gleamed in the bright sun and it showed of it's thick mucles. "Try a Hydro Pump!" commanded May. At her words, Blastoise's cannons game up from it's shell and it shot a powerful jet of water at Whiscash. Whiscash didn't dodge, but got hit by the attack. It hadn't been affected at all! "Hey! That was supposed to do some serious damage!" complained May. "Duh, it's a Water-type, your Water-type moves aren't going to do much against it," informed Drew. "Oh that's right! Uh . . . . Rapid Spin then!" ordered May. Blastoise pulled its head and limbs inside its shell and began to spin swiftly and spin towards Whiscash. Whiscash shot mud from its mouth and stopped Blastoise in its tracks! "What happened!?" wondered May puzzled. With that, Whiscash jumped back into the lake and out of sight. May sighed. "Return Blastoise . . . . " Then she turned to Drew. "You know we're not leaving until I catch that Whiscash right?" Drew looked stunned for a moment. "But May! We've got to get to the next Contest Hall!" "I know, that can wait," May proudly said. "No it can't! May do you even understand how much time we have before the next contest!" Drew urged, almost hysterical. "Yeah, a year, that's a long time," pointed out May. "No it's not! There are limited contests May! We can't just skip of a few just like that! No!" explained Drew stubbornly. "Ok fine. We'll stay for one day and then move on!" Drew sighed, one day was a lot of time to him, but just glad that May wasn't staying forever, he said nothing. "Alright Blastoise, search that lake! We've just gotta catch that Whiscash!" ordered May confidently. Blastoise obeyed and jumped into the sparkling blue lake to find Whiscash. Drew felt himself leaning on a nearby tree and then suddenly sunk down. May sunk down beside him as though she really wanted to chat. "What?" said Drew irritably. "Nothin'! Just thought you might wanna talk or something," May cheerfully said. "Not really." May didn't reply and Drew was glad as he was tired of talking about pointless go-nowhere topics. May and Drew sat quietly against the tree for a few moments, not daring to look at each other. Drew's mind was buzzing. He was thinking about the night before when he had kissed May. It was certainly not like him to even like a girl! Finally, a loud splash from the lake broke the silence. Blastoise's head appeared and it waved a large claw to May. May stood up. "Did you find it!?" Blastoise nodded and showed May it's hands which were holding a wriggling Whiscash. Blastoise threw it to the shore and jumped after it. "Yeah! Ready for another battle!" yelled May, but then she noticed that the Whiscash was already knocked out. Thinking quickly and grabbing an empty poke ball, May threw it at the shining blue fish Pokemon. When the ball hit Whiscash, it was absorbed into May's poke ball in a red light. The ball wobbled back and forth before finally stopping. May had caught it. "Yeah! I caught a Whiscash!" May happily exclaimed as she picked up her poke ball of the ground. "Impressed with yourself?" questioned Drew. "Blastoise should be getting the credit for this." "I know that!" Snapped May. "Like any of your Pokemon are as good." "Oh really? Is that what you think? How about a little battle then? Your Whiscash verses my Treecko, we'll just see who's better," challenged Drew with a confident smirk. Then he flipped May a bright red rose. "Good luck to you May." May threw her Poké Ball to the ground, and Whiscash reappeared, flopping around with the same goofy smile. Drew threw his too, which of course released Treecko. "Uh . . . let's see . . . what moves can Whiscash do?" May was trying to remember the attacks it had used on Drew earlier. "Oh yeah! Use Mud Shot!" Whiscash stopped flopping and shot a large dirty mud ball at Treecko. Drew found it hard to command an attack. Treecko got hit hard in the stomach. "What's wrong Drew? Too good for you?" said May with a smirk. "Uh no, not at all . . . . Treecko use Ember," ordered Drew. Treecko turned and looked at Drew as well as May. "Uh Drew, Treecko can't learn Ember," informed May, forcing herself to hold back a giggle. "Yeah, I was just tricking you," Said Drew nervously. He wasn't afraid to attack the Whiscash, but it was May's and well . . . . Drew felt like he couldn't attack. "Not such a show off now huh? Go Whiscash, finish it with a Body Slam!" called May confidently. Whiscash used its small light blue tail to lift itself into the air and on to Treecko. Whishcash made a clean hit and practically killed Treecko from its massive body weight. Drew recalled Treecko. "Wow Drew! I was convinced you were a really good trainer!" Said May happily hugging her new Pokemon." "I am . . . . "He muttered. Why didn't he attack her? Or dodge any attacks? Was it a weakness to Whiscash? Or May? Drew thought to himself for a while, slumping back against the tree and falling into a deep stare at a pretty, fluffy white cloud over head. "Oh yeah! In all the heat of the battle, I forgot I can only carry 6 Pokemon with me at a time! I'll send Venusaur back" Said May. She pulled out her Poké Ball and placed Venusaur's poke ball inside. It glowed white for a second and disappeared. "There." May realized Drew was acting even more quiet than usual, if possible. "Drew?" she said suddenly. Drew jumped at the sound of his name but then went back to thinking . . . . staring at the one cloud . . . . "Are you . . . ok?" she asked slowly. "Is it the battle?" "Uh . . . no! Not at all!" answered Drew quickly. May shrugged and went back to play with Whiscash. Drew's mind started to wonder. Why did he get in bed with her the night before? Why had he kissed her? He hadn't known her that long. It wasn't that Drew was mad at himself, just curious at his own acts. Was it the right thing to do? To get the point across to May? Drew got up and walked into the darker shades of the tree. May hadn't really noticed, who would? Drew was way too quiet. He sighed and walked further. This side of the forest was very different from the breezy field he and May stopped to take a break. It was dark from the thick branches belonging to the giant trees. The ground was muddy, no sunlight came through so grass couldn't grow. Drew didn't mind much. He just wanted to be left alone for a while. All of a sudden, blue flames appeared out of no where and surronded Drew. Drew panicked for a moment, not knowing what was going on. He tried to duck and go under the flames but they always went to his level. Drew was scarred to touch the flickering blue flames and tried calling for May. On a branch in a near by tree, Sableye sat lauging as it directed the flames with its clawed hand. The flames were just an illusion, and Drew fell for it . . . . * * * "That was an awesome battle Whiscash, you really are better than you look!" praised May holding the slippery blue fins of her Whiscash, as the Pokémon smiled and nodded. She turned around to brag to Drew again about her victory, but realized he was gone! "Such a strange, strange kid. Where could he have gone then?" Whiscash tugged at May's leg and then pointed its head towards a dark patch of trees. "In there?" Said May nervously. "I guess . . . . But then again, maybe I should just leave him alone? Nah, not in my nature to stay out of other's business!" She pulled Whiscash into her arms and began to stroll into the forest. Once inside, May began to lose confidence. "It sure is dark in here" She said nervously glancing at the dark outlines of trees. Then May heard a familar voice, "May!" "That sounded like Drew! Hold on, I'm coming!" answered May. She started to run towards the sound of Drew's voice. She came to a wide clearing, there she was Drew crouched on the ground with his arms over his head. "Drew! What's wrong?" asked May. "Don't you see the flames! Help me out here! Don't just stand there!" snapped Drew. "I think your being cranky has caused you to see mirages Mr. Smarty Pants!" May sarcastically told him. "Huh?" mumbled Drew standing up. He put his hands through one of the illusions. "Hey! It's just an illusion after all!" "Geez, and they call girls crazy . . . " said May quietly. All of a sudden, the flames glowed a bright blue. "Hey I can see the flames now!" Said May pointing at the blue balls of fire circling Drew's head. "Ahh! That means--" "It's a Will-O-Wisp attack! Drew watch out!" finished May. The flames started to take turns dive bombing Drew, and Drew was some how managing to dodge them all, but with difficulty. Then, Whiscash jumped out of May's arms. It's tail fin began to glow and lighten the dark forest brighter than the eerie blue flames. Next, Whiscash used its glowing tail to jump up and slam something small up in a near by tree. Sableye tumbled down, and the flames it was apparently controlling, disappeared. "May! That was an Iron Tail attack!" exclaimed Drew. "And that's that pesky Sableye again!" complained May. "Uh May, I think it's knocked out, let's just get out of here for now" Said Drew, grabbing May's hand and pulling her out of the forest, Whiscash flopping along. * * * "Ah! I'll never complain about the sun ever again!" admitted May as she put on a big smile. "We'll see about that in the next contest," Drew said with a familar smirk. "Oh yeah!? And why is that?" "Ugh, of course I wouldn't expect you to know. The next contest happens to be in Solarzia Town, in that contest, you use Fire and Grass type Pokemon only." informed Drew. "Of course I knew that!" white lied May, turning a little red. "Yeah ok, save your talking for the Contest, we still have a while to go, according to my Poke'Nav." ____________________________________________________ The two walked down a new path, looking towards a brighter future, and a very promising Solariza Town waiting ahead. What new adventures await? What challenges are just ahead? May and Drew are soon to find out!
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Post by MiloticSoldier on Apr 29, 2006 19:12:09 GMT -5
More developed than some of the stories that I've read so far. Do you want to get HarleyScarow to help you edit the everyday mistakes for you? Here is a spoiler that WobbuffetDS told me when we were in school yesterday: The name of the next town is BlueBrook Town and there's going to be a water boss that Harley hires. Have fun reading it when it comes out! Stupid homework's blocking him, though.
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